All Comments on 'Making Angelina My Cum Slut'

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prop69prop69over 6 years ago
Hott Story...Hope she get pregnant and returns

Haas she stopped taking her birth control pills? Can't get pregnant as long as she is taking the pills.

Hope you will continue the story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Really??

I realize that this story is fiction, but still, let's at least keep things anatomically correct. To start with, you say that you were fucking her from behind and your balls were slapping off her ass? Which one of you is built backwards? Secondly, you were behind her fucking her in the ass for the first time ever and chewing on her nipples again how is that possible? I realize fiction, but again, trying to make constructive criticisms.

SN88SN88over 6 years ago
Really

It started out good. Then the cousin showed up and was rushed all the way to the end. It had potential to be a good read but not after that ending.

prop69prop69over 6 years ago
Had some good points.

Thought he should have been more tender. He loved his cousin and was a little rough.

Hope she gets pregnant and returns.

Hope you had another chapter

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Is

English your native language?

Did you Proof Read before Posting?

Second sentence for example - " I wasn't really successful in my studies, so I decided quitting school to work at my dad's super market."

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Great

Story, I'd like to see more

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
I

Loved it. Great story. Can't wait to read more

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
LIKE A ROCK !!!!

Great story looking forward to more.... try and add details and it will take you to a whole new level.....

YouwritelikearetardfucksYouwritelikearetardfucks8 months ago

One of the worst stories I've ever read I honestly can't believe the comments telling you this was a good story, trash dialogue, awkward plot, and the absolute biggest failure of the story is the sex scene, you and so so many writers on here take the time to write an "erotic" story and describe 10 seconds of sex...why... besides the guy telling the virgin her first time won't hurt... you proceed with it hurting her, then you get the position wrong then bam bam bam it's over...I cannot understand why you guys do this, paragraphs of setup then "I put it in...feels good...I'm cumming" theeen this virgin who just had 12.7 seconds of painful vaginal sex immediately wants to have anal sex...have you actually had sex in real life dude? I'm really questioning if you have because you clearly don't have a clue at least about writing about it and usually a person's experience dictates what is written, if you think 20 seconds of sex is normal than this makes complete sense but yeah awful just awful

AnonymousAnonymous8 months ago

5 Stars - Best story

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