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I liked these lines:
"mother's rain father's fury
bare consequences of both
I am fire and rain"
Though I wonder if in keeping with using "fire" in place of "fury", if there might be something to use in place of repeating "rain". Perhaps even the simple, Zodical water?
Read as..
Dear Sand,
This had such a First Nations feel to it that I could almost see the turquoise beads and see the head-dresses of porqupine quills.
Mii maanda niigaan da-ni-giizhgak ge-mno-aabjitooyan.
Be well, dear friend.
I can't
speak as eloquently as Dusty..
But I agree, having read a little about Indian myth and lore this captures the spirit of their beliefs perfectly.
Everything is sacred, all is related and interdependent, and the answers you seek are all around you.
excellent poem...almost a prayer.
Thank you
yes
love the sparse language and independent, yet connected lines.
very cool--
thanks for playing :P
no thermo
very nice reading
this was very enjoyable / i do not see the reason for the off-margin formatting, but that is not a large point
lovely piece
i especially liked the close.
Simply
beautiful!
this sings to my soul
thank you.
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