I enjoyed this but I think it could use more dialogue from her during the climax. She needs to let go of her frustrations with some really foul language.
The story was great. I just think you might want to get someone to proofread your stories before submitting them. I noticed more than a few grammar mistakes while I read it. Other than that, the story rocked! I look forward to seeing what happens next.
by
Anonymous06/12/06
part 2?
please say there is a part 2.......Jenny86753_09@yahoo.com
Kisses, Jenny
by
Anonymous07/14/06
Very Hot
I loved this story it was so hot!! My cock was hard as a steel rod when I finished. Please continue this story.
by
Anonymous08/10/06
hanging in the air
Hey dont leave us hanging in the air. Do the part II right now. You have a fucking good story buddy and we will be waiting for the part II. Keep it up!!!!
by
Anonymous10/26/06
Awesome
This story was awesome! however, you need to carry this story on! Do they end up living as a couple?
by
Anonymous03/29/08
....
Good story... but he is supposed to be a teenager, he sounded like 6 year old asking for and getting the christmas present he wants, but this also happened very fast too.... rather bad characterization and a 'weenager' including very little detail makes this a poor attempt a best... sorry mate.
by
Anonymous05/20/08
It sucked
fuck.........that was the worst ever. A 00.
by
Anonymous08/05/09
it happens every day of the year
A testosterone filled teenage boy who's constantly hard lives alone with his mother who hasn't been truly fucked in ages, and what do you think's going to happen? The son, Jimmy, is enthralled by his mother's tits, ass, and above all her gorgeous maternal twat. As far as Jim-boy's concerned, her mommy-twat is the one perfect place to bury is big dick. He feels her up, proudly shows his mother his big stiff prick, and Mom is practically hypnotized! Where did her boy get such a beautiful fat cock? Jimmy needs to shove it up his mother's sweet cunt, his mother needs it up her needy twat, and nature takes its course. Nothing more normal or natural--a stiff family dick, the son's, goes up a family cunt, the mother's. The son unloads his big balls up where he came out of, the mother treasures her boy's big dose of semen up his own birth canal--it's happening all over the country every day of the year!
It's a shame that the author didn't finish this story
A good storyline and the writing was easy to follow and very erotic. It's a shame that the author didn't tell us all about how mom fell in love with her son and the sexual love affair that followed. I think it would be a great series.
I HOPE THIS KID IS NOT WALKING THE STREETS, HES NUTS. AND AS FOR MOM, WHAT EVER HAPPEN TO A KICK IN THE BALLS THAT STOPS THEM MOST OF THE TIME. OR IS SHE LIKE MOST OF THE OF THE WOMEN, LITTLE TO NO WILLPOWER. AT LEAST HE ONLY HAD 6 INCHES AND NOT AN AVERAGE STORY COCK YOU KNOW 10 TO 12 INCHES.THE STORY COULD HAVE BEEN BETTER...........LAROC OF AGES
Enjoyed the story.
Did note one thing on grammar.:
Falling
bypurple_angel
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badly needed painted and
SUGGEST EITHER:
badly in need of being painted and
or
badly needed painting and
--------------------------------------
Good job though.
I liked this story. I think it could have been better, but then again it could be worse too. Since I can't write very well I won't even make any comments about grammar and spelling. I will say that it is natural for a teenager to get turned on by his mom. From the time my son was 15 I would hear him masturbating and calling out my name as he did. I got turned on by him doing that for 2 years until we finally started a relationship.
Why don't you write some more.
Hugs and kisses to you and all the men out there who love mom and son incest.
Mary
m330g430@yahoo.com
by
Anonymous12/06/14
hot
that made me so horny!!!!!
by
Anonymous06/26/16
more
I really liked it,but onlygave you a 4. I think you have the basis for a top notch porn story, but it needs to be expanded, I bet you could do it.
English
Fallen!
Pretty hot stuff. Could have used a bit more finesse.
Where do they go from here? Do we find out?
Lukas
Very Erotic
Loved it, but was left wanting more!
Bit More Dialogue
I enjoyed this but I think it could use more dialogue from her during the climax. She needs to let go of her frustrations with some really foul language.
Not bad
The story was great. I just think you might want to get someone to proofread your stories before submitting them. I noticed more than a few grammar mistakes while I read it. Other than that, the story rocked! I look forward to seeing what happens next.
part 2?
please say there is a part 2.......Jenny86753_09@yahoo.com
Kisses, Jenny
Very Hot
I loved this story it was so hot!! My cock was hard as a steel rod when I finished. Please continue this story.
hanging in the air
Hey dont leave us hanging in the air. Do the part II right now. You have a fucking good story buddy and we will be waiting for the part II. Keep it up!!!!
Awesome
This story was awesome! however, you need to carry this story on! Do they end up living as a couple?
....
Good story... but he is supposed to be a teenager, he sounded like 6 year old asking for and getting the christmas present he wants, but this also happened very fast too.... rather bad characterization and a 'weenager' including very little detail makes this a poor attempt a best... sorry mate.
It sucked
fuck.........that was the worst ever. A 00.
it happens every day of the year
A testosterone filled teenage boy who's constantly hard lives alone with his mother who hasn't been truly fucked in ages, and what do you think's going to happen? The son, Jimmy, is enthralled by his mother's tits, ass, and above all her gorgeous maternal twat. As far as Jim-boy's concerned, her mommy-twat is the one perfect place to bury is big dick. He feels her up, proudly shows his mother his big stiff prick, and Mom is practically hypnotized! Where did her boy get such a beautiful fat cock? Jimmy needs to shove it up his mother's sweet cunt, his mother needs it up her needy twat, and nature takes its course. Nothing more normal or natural--a stiff family dick, the son's, goes up a family cunt, the mother's. The son unloads his big balls up where he came out of, the mother treasures her boy's big dose of semen up his own birth canal--it's happening all over the country every day of the year!
It's a shame that the author didn't finish this story
A good storyline and the writing was easy to follow and very erotic. It's a shame that the author didn't tell us all about how mom fell in love with her son and the sexual love affair that followed. I think it would be a great series.
wow?
Hope he got dressed before running to store!
WHAT A STORY !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I HOPE THIS KID IS NOT WALKING THE STREETS, HES NUTS. AND AS FOR MOM, WHAT EVER HAPPEN TO A KICK IN THE BALLS THAT STOPS THEM MOST OF THE TIME. OR IS SHE LIKE MOST OF THE OF THE WOMEN, LITTLE TO NO WILLPOWER. AT LEAST HE ONLY HAD 6 INCHES AND NOT AN AVERAGE STORY COCK YOU KNOW 10 TO 12 INCHES.THE STORY COULD HAVE BEEN BETTER...........LAROC OF AGES
Good story.
Enjoyed the story.
Did note one thing on grammar.:
Falling
bypurple_angel
----------------- ---------------------
badly needed painted and
SUGGEST EITHER:
badly in need of being painted and
or
badly needed painting and
--------------------------------------
Good job though.
Enjoyable Story
I liked this story. I think it could have been better, but then again it could be worse too. Since I can't write very well I won't even make any comments about grammar and spelling. I will say that it is natural for a teenager to get turned on by his mom. From the time my son was 15 I would hear him masturbating and calling out my name as he did. I got turned on by him doing that for 2 years until we finally started a relationship.
Why don't you write some more.
Hugs and kisses to you and all the men out there who love mom and son incest.
Mary
m330g430@yahoo.com
hot
that made me so horny!!!!!
more
I really liked it,but onlygave you a 4. I think you have the basis for a top notch porn story, but it needs to be expanded, I bet you could do it.
let me know if and when you do.
thanks,
dick & joan
alsoestfriends@yahoocom
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