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While crafted for the challenge...
...there's awesome possibilities in the line "there's blood on the moon tonight". Keep that line kicking around on a slip of paper!
This is
a painting.
and it's both haunting and beautiful.
I agree I'd love to see it expanded....
but I love it as it is.
great job
bloody! eek!
Intense! I like the repetition. Made it mantra or chant like.
I could live without the last line, it did not seem to fit in with the rhythm of the rest.
you got a great moon to work with!
ps no thermo
pps my security code was the last 4 digits of my childhood phone number!!!!
Bloody Hell LOL
Uh huh LOL
Bloody. ;-)
that is a wonderful, repeated line
it seems this poem has potential for development and was stifled by the constraints of the challenge rules / if this were mine, i would expand it by a large margin /
There's blood on the moon tonight
and it rose to the challenge. This is wonderful.
there's more to this story.
this left me wondering what..but boo this is wonderful!!
care to enlighten on the rest of the story?
this is my first real chance at reading some poetry in about 4 weeks..nice place to start!
Wow Boo...
... I am in agreement with some of the others that there is a lot evoked by these ten lines. Great spark-thrower! It makes me want to write a story to go behind it, although not necessarily for Lit...
Wonderful work
lovely lines
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