This story is written well, but these people (especially the guy) are weird, not to mention completely untrustworthy and therefor completely unsympathetic.
I thought that this was a pretty good story. It is fiction and if you people are so offended by it, then why the hell are you reading EROTIC FICTION in the first place. There are stories about incest on this site too so why don't you losers criticize that instead of a fantasy? The author sounds like a female so I'm guessing it wasn't about herself at all.
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Anonymous09/13/04
good story
I like characters that can throw away their moral values for a few horny stolen moments. Liked all the characters, would love to read a follow up story on Raven. Keep up the good work.
English
Huh?
This story is written well, but these people (especially the guy) are weird, not to mention completely untrustworthy and therefor completely unsympathetic.
chill
I thought that this was a pretty good story. It is fiction and if you people are so offended by it, then why the hell are you reading EROTIC FICTION in the first place. There are stories about incest on this site too so why don't you losers criticize that instead of a fantasy? The author sounds like a female so I'm guessing it wasn't about herself at all.
good story
I like characters that can throw away their moral values for a few horny stolen moments. Liked all the characters, would love to read a follow up story on Raven. Keep up the good work.
Love
I loved it. It was very erotic.
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