All Comments on 'A Perfect Wedding'

However, it didn't really flow at all and seemed to be rather stilted

Yes this is a dream of the kind of wedding I would like to have if and when I remarry. I write from my heart about my dreams and fantasies. This was my second time I wrote something, this turned out to be the first one submitted. I have been impressed with how many times this story has been read in the last 4 days. A whopping 3700+ times thats impressive and better than I expected for a first story.

You seem to force your feelings, and not let them flow smoothly. You say you write what is in your heart, yet the words seem empty. The thoughts are a bit scattered for my taste. It needs some refining.