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Wife at Strip Joint Ch. 04

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous09/10/04

I Like It

If a guy had a wife like this that was totally comitted to her work, he could retire and never do anything except fish,hunt, and play golf ever again.

She, being a whore is so hot. I wish my wife would do it. She is a bitch anyway and a nagging bitch at that. If she would fuck like this wife would do at a strip joint, maybe she would get a dose of aids and that way I could really live high on the hog on her life insurance money, no longer wishing that she would meet her demise from some other form of malody. lol

The main thing this guy needs to remember is to never to kiss, fuck, or let her even give him head again because she maybe infected with a little gift that keeps on giving.

Think strange pussy or jack-off.

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by Anonymous09/10/04

Once again, please see an editor

This was originally posted under the moniker Mrs. Canyon. For some reason, this writer is reposting everything under a slightly new name. I would have presumed that they would have taken advantage of this action to "fix" the problems with the writing, but that doesn't seem to have happened. Therefore, I'm reposting the comments I made on this chapter. Again, it was not my intention to dump on this writer, but I see this problem all too often.

BTW, this was the last chapter posted under the old moniker. Will there be new chapters?

I don't mean to dump on this writer, but I see this problem all to often, and I'm only posting this publicly so that others may also learn.

You have a problem with pronouns. It's either that or so much of what you designate as quoted dialog is really third person narrative you've enclose in quotation marks. Take for example the last two paragraphs. A quick and dirty edit follows.

I asked Steve, ?Maybe you should save some cum for your wife and not dump so much into my wife.?

He said, "It's okay. My wife is on the rag, and she knew I wanted to fuck Tracy some more. She actually told me to come on over to your place and fuck my newest whore.?

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by gizzmo30109/10/04

Where is this going?

I know this a great fanasy and maybe some men out there would like to see things like this happen to there wifes. But I would hope you shake things up surely hubby has a limit that you can push him to so he will get mad and have a backbone. Everyone has a limit somewhere and when they reach it enough is enough, WHEN WILL HUBBY PUT A STOP TO HER BEING A WHORE. She is now doing it for her not him.......time for things to turn around and maybe they can stay married because he pushed her into it but he needs to stop her now.... she is steves's whore dose hubby have a wife..... yes or no TELL US

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by fumunda cheeze09/10/04

to annonymous in mo.

What are you doing reading erotica you bible thumping fuckhead.

Its just a story. Inotice you use all caps. what are you shouting at? your baptist congregation, i'll bet.

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by TammyTrueheart09/10/04

Good story

What's love got to do with?

C'mon guys this is Literotica.

I get those self-righteous assholes too who think the story is real and get all upset with the woman acting like a slut of a guy a pussy.

In Literotica, there is only one question, "Can I dance to it?" If you can't get your fingers going, it's bad. If you can get them going, it's good.

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by Anonymous03/26/08

give this chic lilly thai's enthusiasm

write some from her viewpoint..she sounz like she is drugged out doin wat the men want. let us know she is goin mad and enjoyin it..screamin do it,harder faster..like lilly thai. she's great

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by stickman4410/07/13

still enjoying

keeps getting better

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by Anonymous12/02/14

AIDS

Soon we had over $30,000.00 in the bank, and two full-blown cases of AIDS!

Living the high life!

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