All Comments on 'Kitten and Dolly'

Would've been better if the characters had names, but then I guess it kind of objectifies them which is what the story is going with so it kind of works. Also you need to proof read your work because at the moment you've got some of the story duplicated right below where you typed originally.

Okay thank you for noticing I will check it now ,Also I didnt think they needed names

normally I don't complain about the way a story is spelled or written because I myself am dyslexic but the way this happened to be written with the paragraphs copied and pasted over and over again and not ordered in a manner that makes any kind of sense not to mention this being just a mediocre story to begin with it made it almost completely impossible to read I like the premise and I'm pretty sure there's a plot of a good story in there but it needs a lot of editing hopefully this is your first story and there's many more to come I would hate to stifle anybody's creativity but I would definitely have someone proofread your stories