All Comments on 'Dear Jane.'

out here in cyber land. This is a subject close to my

heart. I love how you wrote this: moving to a bitter

climax without pussyfooting around. Good beat to get

you through.

... "honesty deceived you" rings so true.

And 'acid raindrops'.

Fantastic job hon!! ;-)

I watched you rework this in the forums, and was intrigued by the process you went through. I chimed in, there, with my two bits about the process.

You have created a very strong poem, here. My question to you: What now?

...in few words. Very nice, Abs - I feel it right along with you.

Poetry is a strange medium. Inspired by deep feelings, too often the emotion is lost in worrying with form, meter and Rhyme. In this one the words don't seem to matter, I already cannot remember them, but the emotion came through with hurrican force. I still feel it.

Bravo

-Colly

Incredible imagery!

so I'll use my space to simply say this:

I expect to see a lot more of your poems here, A/J :D

(themometer left at default and does not reflect my vote)

is not a strong enough word to describe how much that poem touched me. Wonderful work, Abs. I'll get you for the tears stinging in my eyes. ;)

Brushes the tear from your cheek.

Take that hand in yours

and find peace in it's soft touch.

Very moving ABs.

Very powerful.

That one blew right through me with a roar. Devastating. Wonderful. Thank you. LJ

come on I wanna see more

aswirls

I agree. You really must write more. This is fantastic.

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 37,000 poems.

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