by tungtied2u
...Is the one comment that I'd offer. I was thoroughly enjoying the repetitive lilt, until I came to this section:
"so many futures
snuffed out
slaughtered
a herd of horrified faces"
I became tongue-tied at the snuffed out/slaughtered, and wondered where the flow went. Perhaps something akin to "flat out snuffed out/and slaughtered"... regardelss, a little tinkering there might be in order.