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Henry_C_RobertsHenry_C_Robertsover 6 years agoAuthor
Charater reference for Susie

Here is artwork of Susie

http://imgur.com/a/JqtKm

This has been provided by

http://designerinc.deviantart.com/

Awesomely, he altered Susie's outfit for the story. Thanks Designerinc

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
attention

it seems a pity that you paid less attention to editing the story than your disclaimer at the beginning. FAR too many writing errors. spelling, vocab, punctuation, all suffered.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Needs review

As mentioned, desperately needs editing. Good basic story though.

MaximguyMaximguyover 6 years ago
Concept is a miss for me.

In a world where most likely women rule, due to their overwhelming majority, somehow a law is in place where the man has the power? With all these women and their libidos going up as you describe, wouldn't it be the other way around? The man would be parceled out to the powerful women.

Henry_C_RobertsHenry_C_Robertsover 6 years agoAuthor
Thanks for the feedback

I will look into editing, more.

The main focus of this story was the ability of men to request without rejection.

The idea of the women not being against it was to make it more willing and not forced in most instances. I will try to consider more reality in other ideas. Thanks

I guess men are sexist even in porn. :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
One other thing doesn't make sense

In a world that had a plague around 1950 and took two centuries to recover, there wouldn't be Star Wars.

Henry_C_RobertsHenry_C_Robertsover 6 years agoAuthor
Star Wars

George Lucas was born in 1944.

Just saying

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Yes, but

If it took two centuries to recover, nobody would have been making Star Wars a mere quarter century later.

Henry_C_RobertsHenry_C_Robertsover 6 years agoAuthor
Star Wars

You never know..

Honestly, the addition of Star Wars was just to have the character in a shirt most everyone would know. I did not ponder it too much.

However, could have been a desk with a missing outline for Star Wars found 150 years later in a garage sale. :)

Also, the desk made an air tight seal to stop the degrading of the paper itself.

UltimateHomeBodyUltimateHomeBodyalmost 6 years ago
Fell asleep

Was there a story? Could not get past all the disclaimers and bs at the start. Get rid of that junk so we can find the story.

Henry_C_RobertsHenry_C_Robertsalmost 6 years agoAuthor

Next time, spin your mouse wheel one half rotation. You will go right by them.

You're welcome.

See you next time you can't sleep.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Grreat!

Loved every bit of it ty. Disclaimers tee shirt and all.

Its a different reality. I like this.

UltimateHomeBodyUltimateHomeBodyalmost 6 years ago
Gott scared

With all the disclaimers I was afraid to read it in case I did something wrong.

You really dont need them. A few words wont stop pirating, and would be ignored anyway.

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Girls in my stories are overly developed. Enjoy and leave a comment. Check me out on Smashwords.com 9/25/19 I just submitted Part 4 of A Different World. I wrote this story about a year ago, but never finished it. I decided an ending, so here you go.

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