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by jd4george09/10/04

This feels tighter...

...than some of your recent pieces. Even so, there are a couple of places where you could tighten it even more. If you'd like a sounding board on this, just ask.

Nice.

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by tarablackwood2209/10/04

I agree....

....with jd4. Reading you is always interesting, but further compression, even here in a tighter piece, is still very much in order.

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