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Chocolate In Between

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by jd4george09/10/04

Caramels and soft centers...

...chewy nuts and nougats. This was rather yummy. I like how chocolate metls on my fingers!!!

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by flyguy6909/10/04

sighs DOES matter

Your writing is very lyrical and, having heard your enchanting voice before, I know it works well with audio nuance. This one bogs down a bit in text, however. I think the utterances of passion would be better implied than stated, and much could be trimmed (the second stanza, e.g.).

Good to see you back, SM.

"Sighs don't matter"! LOL

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by Liar09/10/04

Your poem is reviewed

...in the New Poems thread over at the forum.

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by slavegurl04/05/07

mmmmmm

you are one of my favorite authors on here and i just love this one. we need to have more of your work and your wonderful voice accompanying it.

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