All Comments on 'The Anniversary Vacation Ch. 03'

I liked the series but wished you had waited longer to submit the second chapter. That would have given you more time to describe what happened in his mom's room after dinner rather than abruptly ending the chapter leaving the reader hanging.

your chapters are turning out to be getting cut short.

Here comes some Mama lovin'

Not a bad story, but your use of pronouns is terrible. Did you skip all grammar classes in school? The proper use of "I" and "me" would make your writing much more enjoyable.

this is is a great story. well told. i like the writing. hopefully in chapter 4 Kenzie is not left out of the action. i like the relationship between her and Tom!

This is great!!

I enjoy every chapter..

Can't wait for the next one

Dad goes off by himself

Tom is invited to "help" his mom

Kenzie is left alone?

What a strange world? They are on vacation on an abandoned beach. Go to empty restaurant. Publicly openly fuck on balconies and there's no one passing, or patrons. It's weird.