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Awesome
Great job! Hurry up and write the rest, so I can read it.
Interesting
I have got to admit you certainly have me intrigued here so yes, I would like you to continue.
HOT
Usually dont roll with the incenst thing, but I read it cuz all your others stories are great. This one is hot as hell, makes me wish I had a brother. Your writing style is awesome - sexy and stylish with poetic flair. Hurry up and write the rest of this series!
One of the More Exceptional Taboo Stories
very well done,,, the fantasy within fantasies,,, it is well done,,, sometimes, esp. when reading too fast, you have to go back and say, wait, is this still a fantasy or is it really happening,,,
great writing style and the dwelve into the inner emotions of the young woman,,, very well done
finally, it'd would be a truly, truly exceptional story if you could somehow retain the reader's interest, from beginning to end, without having the siblings engaging in actual sex --- but have them care deeply, emotionally, romantically, and otherwise about each other,,,
99.999 of the stories here is too predictable, without any serious imagination. sometimes it is within the first word that we see the penis and the vagina coming together; other times it happens a couple paragraphs later; sometimes at the end; sometimes yet they happen in the second or third part,,,
see if you could, again, retain the suspense, the romance, the emotional roller-coster, the sense of love and family, etc. until the end, without bringing the siblings to some
predictable situation like 99.999 of the other stories ---- and do it in such a way that is still erotic, romantic, taboo, and all that!
that's the challenge,,, and from the style of writing, the creativity of this author, it seems it is a possible task for him/her!
A Thank You From Fantasy Kiss
To AWESOME and INTERESTING- Thank you so much for your support. I'm glad you like the beginning, lets hope it contines.
To HOT- Thank you soooooo much. you responsed to Florida Vacation, too, I'm guessing. If you want, e-mail me and i'll let you know when more of my stuff comes out, so you don't have to keep looking.
To EXCEPTIONAL TABOO STORIES- Wow! Biggest compliment I've heard in a while. I only hope I can live up to your praise and don't disapoint. I'd be interested in your futher thoughts as the sequel comes out. E-mail me too.
PART TWO SHALL POST SOON.
~Fantasy Kiss
P.S I would like to apologize for the story centering in the middle. i have no idea why it does that.
WOW!
This story was VERY well written romantic yet exiting and forbidden I hope you will continue this erotic and sexy story!
Anja
Distracted
Great content, but I was distracted by the formatting. Any way that can be fixed to left justificarion? Again, great content.
Great
I don't really care for the incest subjects, but your writing is very good. I loved reading it. YOu really do have a talent for writing. I'll finish the rest of the series tomorrow or later, but I really do love your style. :) Dave
Very Hot!
Reminds me a lot of what I did with Still Hot! (though yours was obviously done way before mine) remember mine ended in a BJ too. The sexual tension between the two are awesome. Looking forward to chapter 2 baby brie. Make me cum! :)
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