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End of the Universe

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous09/13/04

urban sprawl

bites yet we are all rather guilty, aren't we. You expressed this sentiment very well, good work :)

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by Angeline09/14/04

Excellent Tung!

I really like this--it's tight and written with great precision.

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by 09/14/04

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Some great stanzas in this, very descriptive and the imagery is done so well. I especially enjoyed this one:

"We have trapped our universe
underfoot
Cocooned it in charcoal grey
Suffocated it with fumes
Drowned it in diesel"

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by LeBroz12/22/07

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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,000 poems.



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