All Comments on 'The Master Ch. 01'

by StealthBreeder

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AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
*gaasp*

I can't wait for the next chapter!

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago

So very much looking forward to this continuing!

DesiredSmileDesiredSmileover 6 years ago
Oh my...

You certainly caught my attention. You are a great storyteller, I eagerly await your next chapter.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Ugghh

Why do people come to the NON CONSENT RELUCTANCE section to complain about the contents when it's clearly laid out in the section title? Nobody cares about your critique when clearly you aren't smart enough to stay away from a section you don't like. Good story btw keep it up

DarkFire8687DarkFire8687over 6 years ago
Keep it up

Excited to see where this goes!

Nurse_TwistedNurse_Twistedover 6 years ago
I Like

I like this a lot, and hope to see more of it. This is the first one of your stories I've read. I'll be looking at some others now

kinkboikinkboiover 6 years ago

Expertly written and I look forward to more! Love your work.

mitchawamitchawaover 6 years ago
Interesting

A novel hook with little background. A round work bench with limited light and a female unable to resist a man of experience. Good plot, limited dialogue, was there any, lots of internal dialogue, an excellent sex scene, and an interesting ending.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Nicely written

I liked Your developing story and very intrigued to see where it goes. I like your descriptions and impressive writing which clearly illuminated the story for the reader. Thank you kindly for your work.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Worthy

Stand alone or continuation. Either way. Very erotic. Well played!

arzurimaidenarzurimaidenover 6 years ago

I have read your previous works but I think this one is the best! Have you been reading my mind?! I really love this type of ravishment story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Not believable female perspective

The language seems less like that of a victim of rape describing her experience and more of the male fantasy of what he would wish his female victim to experience. She describes herself as a "prize", his cock "kisses" her pussy rather than invades. She even waits to scream until her mouth is covered. She starts out saying its a nightmare but the language doesn't support it, would work better from the males perspective to be believable at this stage of things, she takes in the "exquisite" sheets before noting she is naked, odd. Also the word you're looking for is sconce.

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