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All Comments on 'Closing Shift'

by YumaMccall7

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AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Get an editor,

Too many mistakes.

Nearly didn't proceed beyond the first paragraph when Mike appeared. Proper names have capital letters, etc, etc.

There is no build up, no character development and the sex is pretty dreadful.

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