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The Builder Ch. 05

byCathleen©
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by Anonymous10/05/04

Beautiful

Absolutely beautiful... tenderness and caring, yet erotic and physically rewarding. A masterful blend of mind, heart and body. Well done.

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by mischevious eye10/06/04

wow

I loved the ways that you took us through their lovemaking. It felt like I was there experiencing it with him

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by Anonymous03/26/05

Not bad.

I wish you would have built up the story a lot more. Her coming to terms with her innerconflict seemed.. artificial. And then you left out their 'fight' which was confusing in itself.

The ending was nicely done. Very romantic.

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