All Comments on 'Cake and Eat It Too'

Do everyone a favor and NEVER submit another story.

I like your work. Keep it up.

But just too many problems of poor writing; from grammar, syntax and spelling, all the way to logical inconsistencies. This could have used some heavy editing. Again, too bad, as the rough idea for the story, though not necessarily original (but by now what new story is of the thousands of LW stories, just in Literotica alone), is good. Sorry, but 1-Star.

Wow you figured out a way for everyone to suffer. It was way over the top. I admit I only finished reading the story to see if you could get every single person. Not one of your best efforts.

Good story....... I like the surprise ending usually..... But not here.... Still gave it 5 stars, but was disappointed/saddened by the ending.

“Gonorrhea scarred baby”??? Doesn’t cross placental barrier. If massive problems usually miscarriage. Baby usually infected upon delivery.

Neither gonorrhea nor chlamydia, generally, causes sterility in men. Gonorrhea can if it attacks reproductive “tubes”, vas deferens, etc. Apparently it is quite painful. So the men would all have known they had been infected if it caused sterility.

If you’re going to make shit up do it by making up town names, or street names, or store/bar/restaurant names, or car model names (but stay away from anything to do with Mustangs unless it’s true LOL). We all agree to suspend rational belief when reading fiction, to a certain extent, but common diseases that you can find on google? If anything, make up a name for an imagnary STD, then you can have it do whatever you want. Painless sterility? Check. Cross placental barrier? Check.

You should have had one of the editors listed that say they know biology (like me) edit your story.

ahh modern women, isnt womens lib great

On the Stupid/Unbelievable Scale, this one rated a stunning 99.999996.

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There was a decent story here, but crappy, unbelievable writing killed that one still in the egg.

Well, that was depressing as hell...