All Comments on 'Spectral'

by Sabledrake

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panthers babepanthers babeover 19 years ago
tell me more

Wow this was great! I was in suspense the entire time. I hope this is chapter 1 and we will find out what happenened in future chapters!

My Erotic TailMy Erotic Tailover 19 years ago
Interesting~

Creative concept...Interesting twist...Flowed like a river till the water fall!!! (~_*) Happy Halloween--Good Luck!

Black TulipBlack Tulipover 19 years ago
Surprise

A nice surprise at the end. I liked the perspective too.

Good luck.

SabledrakeSabledrakeover 19 years agoAuthor
Thanks!

This one was challenging to write, but I think it turned out prety good. Thanks for the feedback!

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Reminded me of "The Continental"

Christopher Walkin's character on Saturday Night Live. Oh well...

Rumple ForeskinRumple Foreskinover 19 years ago
Nice!

SD, if I hadn't already given you a five, I would give you and extra point for this:

"Little ghosts and ghouls laughing in the night, a night often cold with the early dark of autumn. Clouds scudding like pale wraiths across the black, a moon sallow and bloated as the face of a corpse."

Well done story with a nice twist. Keep up the good work.

Rumple Foreskin

sacksackover 19 years ago
Rather startling!

Very original and well written. I think you would like one of my contest entries Who Killed Lois Laynes? (in the New Section) You appear to have enough smarts to solve this Literotica murder mystery. Good luck!

impressiveimpressiveover 19 years ago
Engaging Prose

I could see this as a poem, even, especially with the cadence. Interesting plot. Nice work.

Boxlicker101Boxlicker101over 19 years ago
Very well written

This was very well written, moving to the climax. A romantic horror story is almost unique.

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Yeeeoooowwwwwlllll!

And death will separate them, and bind them in ways that are too strange for any to know. Only true love will pass the barriers of that world

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Fascinating

I'm not sure whether to be freaked out or turned on. A bit of both, really. Very moving, and exquisitely romantic in a very unusual way. I especially enjoyed the second-person narration. A clever touch, that.

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