Not always, but I sure would love to be watching this from one of those sailboats. Very hot Luckster! I love swimming naked too, and the way a woman looks with just her head, shoulders and nipples above water as she swims on her back...yumm!
by
10/05/04
..."creating a dancing mist"
smiling hugely. this seems so remarkably familiar. *grin* awesome tale, Lucky. i could see the whole story evolve as if it truely did happen. the love shines through the rain. brilliant job...im still smiling.
v~
Wonderful story, Lucky! Hot, sexy and wild - your two characters are very lucky to have one another and to be in love!
Honey
by
10/05/04
Floating in a sea of bliss...
I could feel the anticipation, the deep emotional bond, and the explosive climax. The story stands beautifully on it's own, but the ties between Vella's story and yours make it even more touching.
Lucky, I always love your stories and this was no exception. The love shows, but combined with the urgency and need you portray so well.....whew! Very very good job. *hugs*
I know I've seen this before, seen these two, in story, or picture. Hmm! *Sigh!* Such love. Vella, are you sure this didn't happen? It sure feels as if it should have. Wonderful, different point of view, Lucky.
Fabulous work, kid. Outstanding. A few swift paragraphs and I am suddenly privy to a passionate love of great fervor and devotion. Worthy short in every way.
I absolutely loved reading the two sides of this story, what a great idea! As usual, your passion shines.
by
10/09/04
Brava
lucky,
great sotry and wonderful to read the tale from a second perspective (seems to me, someone I know did that too!). Hopefully you two can do this again sometime and keep on writing too.
Once again you've managed to come up with another totally hot and enthralling story, pulling the reader in and wrapping them up in the moment.
Wonderful!!!
I wish someone would compile a handy dictionary of
...superlatives. Then I wouldn't keep running out of them.
An incredibly sexy story, shot throughout with realism, and glimpses of a 'real' relationship. I loved every word, and was so sorry when it ended. I wanted more.
Mat xx
About half way through the first page and while it was raining heavily, the moon shined on her breasts. Usually when it is raining that hard, the moon is nowhere to be seen.
English
God I love the beach sometimes...
Not always, but I sure would love to be watching this from one of those sailboats. Very hot Luckster! I love swimming naked too, and the way a woman looks with just her head, shoulders and nipples above water as she swims on her back...yumm!
..."creating a dancing mist"
smiling hugely. this seems so remarkably familiar. *grin* awesome tale, Lucky. i could see the whole story evolve as if it truely did happen. the love shines through the rain. brilliant job...im still smiling.
v~
Beaches and cream
Wonderful story, Lucky! Hot, sexy and wild - your two characters are very lucky to have one another and to be in love!
Honey
Floating in a sea of bliss...
I could feel the anticipation, the deep emotional bond, and the explosive climax. The story stands beautifully on it's own, but the ties between Vella's story and yours make it even more touching.
Great work, Tex.
Beautiful
Lucky, I always love your stories and this was no exception. The love shows, but combined with the urgency and need you portray so well.....whew! Very very good job. *hugs*
Seriously distracting!
I'm SUPPOSED to be concentrating on other things, ya know?
I absolutely LOVE the alternate POVs of the two stories. What a team!
A tale twice told?
I know I've seen this before, seen these two, in story, or picture. Hmm! *Sigh!* Such love. Vella, are you sure this didn't happen? It sure feels as if it should have. Wonderful, different point of view, Lucky.
mismused
Lucky, sweetheart, you can really write!
Fabulous work, kid. Outstanding. A few swift paragraphs and I am suddenly privy to a passionate love of great fervor and devotion. Worthy short in every way.
Wow!
I absolutely loved reading the two sides of this story, what a great idea! As usual, your passion shines.
Brava
lucky,
great sotry and wonderful to read the tale from a second perspective (seems to me, someone I know did that too!). Hopefully you two can do this again sometime and keep on writing too.
Another winner
Once again you've managed to come up with another totally hot and enthralling story, pulling the reader in and wrapping them up in the moment.
Wonderful!!!
I wish someone would compile a handy dictionary of
...superlatives. Then I wouldn't keep running out of them.
An incredibly sexy story, shot throughout with realism, and glimpses of a 'real' relationship. I loved every word, and was so sorry when it ended. I wanted more.
Mat xx
I'm Not Even a Lesbian!
... And I still enjoyed it! Atta girl!
Comfort food...
Ahh...very nice Lucky11. A fine story of passion shared between two lovers...full of dreams so close to reality. I don't want to wake up.
I loved this story. So sensual.
Rain and moon?
About half way through the first page and while it was raining heavily, the moon shined on her breasts. Usually when it is raining that hard, the moon is nowhere to be seen.
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