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Beautiful
Long distance love...you've summed it up through the beauty of your words. you've made me feel, deeply, the sense of frustration of longing.
soon~
v
right on time
The words are just right, evoking the feelings that come with lovers separated by distance. Very sweet and still powerful.
-Colly
Words, only words.........
........but what words.
Evocative, emotive, deeply sincere.
Beautiful. Thank you for sharing. Mat xx
Sweet & hopeful
You illustrate the trials and tribulations of long distance love well, hun.
hmmmm.
And you don't write more poems because why????
shit
I know I hit the 100 button....bastard computer!!!!
Nice and Leisurely
Was it deliberate to use so many one word lines? It forces you to read it more slowly, thus reinforcing the point about the longing for continuation of long distance love.
Nice job sexy.
understand
being 1000 miles away from the one i love....i can assure you lady that you hit the nail on the head...it is as it is...nice job and well done....i hope you see her soon...and not just in your dreams!
Someday, someone ...
... will feel this way about ME. The ache jumped off the screen and right into my heart. ~Imp
Superb closing to a great poem
It is inherently difficult to write well about meeting long-distance lovers. We've all heard the story quite often. But this poem does a wonderful job with this challenging topic. It starts with a startle that is conveyed nicely to the reader, and moves beautifully through simple, powerful phrases like "The click of the line/ so subtle, /so final" to build empathy and interest. The last two stanzas I found absolutely superb and deeply moving in their quiet recognition of reality weighed with hope and love. Excellent work, Lucky.
Your words
poignantly and eloquently capture the heights and depths of long distance love. Beautifully written and deeply affecting. Thank you for sharing this with us. LJ
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