All Comments on 'A Dark Heart'

I have to applaud your most creative imagination. Now...for your next "Trick?"

So if the old lady was baba yaga, are we going to see more of this story.

Texanguy

Definitely looking forward to reading more from this story and i see there is a possibility for a tie in with another of yours...interesting lol

I understand you may already be stretched thin with so many other stories, but I really hope you continue this one and not leave it as a one shot. Absolutely awesome Halloween story!!!!

Seems to follow a few tropes from the Satyr Play storyline. Will they be in the same universe? Will Stanley meet Nathan one day? Was an interesting story, but left so many questions for a "stand-alone" I look forward to seeing more though.

I hope you continue this story!! Great stuff!!

Will dimensions overlap?

Looking forward to further explorations of this type/in this "universe". Thank you!

I very much enjoyed this "short" story. Like another comment noted, it appears to be in the Saytr universe. It also appears that Nate too has "wild" magic. Is this a one off story? Or are you building a new characters for an expanded storyline? Is this the return of the lord's and lady's of the hidden races? Ones that will have to challenge the current system of governance among the races? You have left several things open in this story if you want to try to continue it, as I suspect is your intention. I have hope that you will create more characters like Nate and Stanley and that some may be female as well. Will you give this reader a hint, or better, the plan for the future of the storylines to Saytr Play and this one? Please?! With sugar on top?!

Now *that's* how to write a Halloween story. Bravo!

you have another charachter / universe to write us about...

we "expect" more frequent updates also :)

It was ok. Interesting at least. Only real quibble I have is it should possibly be in non human. If its in the satyr universe I think its a welcome addition and should be cool add in if the protagonists meet.

I only read this because of my respect for your other stories, but this is awful. it's just not coherent.

1 star

wonderful story line and a great lead to begin a new volume. we will look forward to learning more.

...while I enjoyed the "voyage of discovery" for Nate and his "reveal" plus spicy sex with Oletha, it didn't quite have the "pop" of other stories: the sex romp did, but I most likely struggle with the short arc overall, since while you explain Nate's "twisting" of human females, we don't receive a sufficient explanation as to why he didn't know his true nature and why he had a compulsion spell on him. Who put it there? Something was definitely missing and that's what my mind picked up on. I'd have suggested a few additional pages, where he hooked up with Oletha more, rather than "wham bam" her and leave with Jo.

However, on the balance of things, we got a good amount of everything, especially the mystery part--which appears to be what your structure supported. 4

That was the best line I think I've ever read in a story, ever.

I'm not familiar with your writing style, but I loved this story enough that I plan to read more. Thank you!

I can see an allusion to satyr play, at least the magic system and attitudes. That's ok it's another favorite.

I don't understand the negativity in the comments. Maybe from folks who have never read a BurntRedStone entry before . But to the supposed other "fans", how was this not cohesive? It's just a short Halloween entry, but it's very obviously a story from the Satyr Play universe, and the Glamour and compulsion were obviously placed by Baba Yaga, who is the only so far known protector of Wild Magic and who the old lady obviously was.

I loved it. Can't wait to see more from both this universe and let's get more Jack!

I love this universe!!! I can't wait till more posts with Baba Yaga are posted. I can't wait I'm so excited, I'm a big fan, keep it up!!!

Great story. I would like to see more about him and find out why his mind was bound.

No need to wait for Halloween. More of this story will be very welcomed.

Thanks!

Cool story - it begs to be continued....

Just finished Part 1 of Satyr play and am now moving onto part 2. Ive fallen in love with the characters you've created and love how naturally you incorporate all the sex as well as the Hidden Races concept. The only time i find it hard to visualize your words is when you start explaining the Fae doing magic. In scenes like the 1 where Stanley was being interrogated in part 1 i really couldnt visualize what the magic looked like if i was standing there watchinh it all happen. But gosh! Your sex scenes are literally the exact opposite, for me. I can visualize your words perfectly. Maybe add more metaphors and such to describe the magic in the future if you keep Stanley alive for another story or spinoff? That way it's easier to picture what you want me to see? Idk. Overall i love your work and am really excited to read Part 2! Hope Nate pops up 😉

What would Baba Yaga have done if Nate didn't escape by himself? She seemed disappointed. It may have added to the story if the reason for her one word comment was hinted at and her name mentioned.

Question: What happened to the girl that swallowed? Is it the old woman's intent to change as many humans as possible by letting wild magic loose in the world?

Okay, okay that's two questions. Guess I like the story.

A study in discovery

So many directions for this to continue.

will there be a part two?

For those asking below, Nate returns in the Satyr Play series

Nice holloween story, you never know what's hiding underneath.

Lol, loved.it! Needed more!

Glad you pointed us here from the satyr series. It did add some context. Thanks

Loved it! Please keep writing and posting @BurntRedstone, many thanks and solid 5* for everything of yours I’ve read so far! Cheers, Ppfzz.

MORE!!!!!

Is that a second failure of a Baba Yaga plan?

BurntRedstone, you did it again. Great reading.

Quite an imagination. But how did he explain his clothes? I did enjoy the story but would like to enjoy more of Mats life.

What a story! You had me already in the beginning with the "black leather pointy boots"...

So deserves a follow up, I’m pretty sure we (who’ve read some of your other stories) have an idea who the “Old Slavic Looking Woman” was, I’d love to read how Nate comes to terms with and learns what his newly discovered self can actually do, I’m going to guess that as he’s capable of wielding wild magic his mysterious origin story might well involve some characters we already know of? Pretty please with a cherry on top?

Many thanks for writing and posting here on Lit, cheers, Ppfzz.

This story was (pun intended) climatic,Nate obviously had no clue he was an incubus until Oletha enlightened him.But honestly it was somewhat of a letdown that as perfect as Nate and O were for eachother the author chose to separate them at the end when they had so much chemistry and similarities,plus Nate could have a long and meaningful relationship with O.

It was obvious that Nate was somewhat different than O that he cared for humans whereas O thought they were parasites,but O still wanted Nate as her lover because he was like her.Sure O looked down on humans but she cared for Nate to want him to stay with her.But besides the ending it was a great story so I would give this 4*s.

Fun and exciting

Definitely would like to read a follow-up in this universe, meet the mysterious women and presumably others.

I still prefer Stanley, sorry!!