All Comments on 'Trick and Treat'

These people are more than a little bit improbable. Perfect work lives, perfect love lives. They're like dolls you put through their paces.

This is a lovely story. So romantic and family based. Please keep uploading. 😍😍

5 stars is not even close to this story, I wish there were more stars because this deserves way more than 5

Very sweet story.

Very nice story even if the characters were a little too good to be true. I really enjoyed reading it even tho it's on a liberating site bit doesn't contain much sex. You should publish it on other sites too

This story made me laugh , cry and got me horny in turn, 5 Stars and a very wonderful job

An amazing read: so well constructed. It brought laughter and tears, but the further I read, the more I knew that I was reading a classic. Well done!

But I can't give more than 1.. The name suggests something related to Halloween, but i am total disappointed by the story, not a romance, nor sex, i am not sure, what to say. The ending seems to be forced, just for adding it to literotica. I never find any issues regarding reading a story of 20..even more pages. But for first time i feel like wasted my time. I even skip paragraphs because it doesn't worth reading, i think you started writing something without knowing where it's leading and how to end it. Literotica should have some editors, to decide whether the content is publishable or not.

First let me thank you for your posting this story. you obviously put a lot of thought and effort into this piece. That said I didn't rate it because I couldn't finish. After half a page of continuous narrative I got bored. It isn't that what you were saying was dull but rather it felt like an oral report on a subject that hadn't grabbed the presenter. I noticed on later pages you had more dialogue but you had already lost me.

The problem is that what makes a great story is it's emotional impact and that is hard to achieve in the third person. Pauli prom experience did touch me and left me wondering why you bothered to as much time on it as you did. The best stories are those that grab the reader's attention or emotions early on.

Thank you for this story.

This felt like it was all over the place. Hard to read, to much going on.

One of best stories I've read erotic and emotional wanted to get too the end to be sure the 2 where happy but didn't want it to end

Thank you

It was a great love story. Thank you

Never really connected with the Characters of the story as they got lost with all the narration. Timeline is all over and it seems Ash was push to the side and got forgotten. Too bad you're one of the writers I bookmark as your past stories are highly rated and understand why it was... got curios why rating are slowly going down on this one... now i know. Too much build up of the career and means of coping from Pauli that seems you got yourself in a tangle web and dont know how to get back.

Too bad... seems Pauli and Ash can be a wonderfull characters... there was just no connection it just on and on.

CS

have to be so many unexplained abbreviations? For example "prepping for LSAT", "GRE exam", "GPAs of 4.0", "SPCA", "Connie's IRAs" ... You despise the Non-American readers who do not understand these expressions immediately, do you?

I do not quite get why this is supposed to be a Halloween story.

I do not like anonymous comments. But I think, some of them do have a point. So much narrative that does not lead further. Why does the reader have to know such a lot about Pauli's legal cases?

Though not sure how it was a Halloween story it was a pleasure to read.

I liked the story just exactly as it was written. It was written just as it could have occurred. The overworked junior lawyer was exactly like my overworked junior accountant daughter numerous years ago. The narrative was necessary to paint the picture as it really was. The acronyms are so common among those with a college education that they should not need further explanation-that might detract from the flow.

If I were to criticize anything about this story, it was that it was too perfect. Life is never this even. This friendship leading to mutual self discovery encountered few if any of the normal challenges to be conquered in real life. But, readers deal with all those challenges themselves, so why not enjoy a light, happy read that is uncomplicated?

It appears that this story was either liked or not. Thank you for your comments. I do not despise non-American readers. One of the joys of this site is getting to know other cultures. I can't recall the number of times I have stopped reading a story to look up a word that is used in another culture. When I started posting here all my writing experience was in scientific papers. I used the contest schedule as a guide to force me to broaden my scope. There will be more postings coming including a novel length (75+K) story. I also want to finish up projects that working.

Keep reading and try writing and posting.

pheacock

I think the story stands well as it is. As with any story, if there's some term in there I don't understand, I just look it up.

I have the same last name

I enjoyed it and the high marks suggested others did well