All Comments on 'Bird skulls'

and create a power in the read. I am glad you are trying your hand at poetry, and while your style is different than mine...(I always have to resist the urge to dissect others poems I'm afraid...) I believe you are accomplishing that haunted feeling. The grey unfeeling people in the dreams contrast with your bleeding and I like particularly the idea that it is the fuss, not the blood, that is their concern.

i dont comment on poetry often as i don't feel prolific/eloquent enough to do so. however, the feeling of helplessness that you invoked in me was strong enough for me to say something. very dark images...sad and provoking.

glad you're doing poetry.

v~

... the surreal and illogical nature of a dream. Very well done! ~Imp

and numbly bleak at first, then a fruitless search, through to idle dissapproval, verging on indifference. Chilling on so many levels. Breathtaking imagery.

This line stood out for me; the one I'll be pondering:

The fuss was unseemly it wasn't the bleeding

I have vivid, sometimes crazy dreams as well. You've captured this one perfectly. Thanks for sharing!

this image

"Just heron skulls rolling around with a dry and hollow helpless sound

Across the bottom of the painted wooden drawer"

and this part could be a poem on its own

"Bland people self-involved would turn incuriously and shoot me a look

Like I was committing some faux pas

I should search more coolly

The fuss was unseemly"

You can turn the capitals off at the beginning of each line if you write your poems in Notepad or go into your options of word and turn off the feature that capitalizes the first word after a line break.

Unless you'd like to stay old-fashioned that is... but I think caps beginning a line work only when you're writing a set form poem in period language, like a sonnet or something.

(Please don't say anything about my style in my early poems ;) I know I rhymed and capitalized too)

One of those really weird dreams

Translates well into really weird poetry.

A poem obsessed with the skulls of birds.

these skull were dinosaurs