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Not bad at all
The first time out is always the roughest. this was a good effort. Erotic horror isn't my genre, but it was very descriptive and certainly painted a scene.
Good luck with your next one :)
-Colly
well written submission
Definitely an interesting concept...but maybe it didn't have to be a dream. I think the dream idea is overused (I rely on it too much myself). I would try on making some of the characters more sympathetic next time, or at least explain why the "hero" likes the abusive treatment. Good luck, Sack
PS- My two contest entries are The Mask (funny) and Who Killed Lois Laynes? (not funny!) The latter hasn't made the Halloween list yet, but is in the New section.
Creepy
A very nice beginning. It was an enjoyable read, but I would have preferred it about twice as long with more detailed descriptions involving all the senses.
Thanks
for the input and feedback so far. I will definitely take it into consideration. I appreciate the tips and suggestions I've been getting via email.
I love this site. :)
Nice story...
If this was your first story you did very well. It was short but so was my first one. Good luck!
Talk about your bad-hair nightmars.
Short, full of action, and ends with a nice twist. Thanks for the story, Lilith.
Rumple
sizzle
short and sweet and very hot. great job.
Hat off
I take my hat off.
A very scary story.
Was this your first???
Good luck.
Nope
Just to answer some questions, this is not my first story on here-it's actually my fifth. I have 2 ID's due to an email foul-up. :(
My first story is entitled: First Encounter and you can find it under lilith79. See that profile and this one for more stories. Thanks for the support!
Not for me
Lilith,
Not my genre, but the writing is good.
couldn't finish
I didn't vote because I couldn't finish it. If this was the story you had trouble getting posted, I can see why.
GREAT FUCK STORY..but
Will she have his demon baby? Why was she spared and the others killed? Why not knock up all the women with demon babies? You must write more.
Longer
I thought it was an original piece. It would probably be better if it were longer.
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