All Comments on 'The Sleeper Train Pt. 02'

You're attempting something extremely tricky with this story and succeeding far better than a beginner deserves to, dammit. (Or have you written stories that aren't here on Lit?) The idea of juggling so many characters right from the start is audacious, and yet effective as well as original: it brings out the contrast between the individuals and creates suspense as the narrative switches from one point of view to another. What I enjoy above all is the interweaving of the romance of travel with sex - the travel is made erotic by the sex and the adventure of the sex is enhanced by the travel. I'm looking forward to part 3.

I'm somewhat confused...so many female characters, I can't tell who is who. In addition, so many "blondes" that were male. As I understand it, a blonde is a female, a male is a blond.