by PTWinters
An absolutely brilliant story. Good content. Lucky Mitch.
More similar please.xx
There has to be a follow-on to this. We need to know what happens at the party.
Good story that was well and carefully written. The characters are believable and the action very sexy. But her shift from shy to controlling was just a little too abrupt--we saw her behaviour change, but there was nothing about her or her feelings to help us see and feel her attitude change. So just an additional sentence or two, properly placed would help us feel the personal shift. And yes, I want to see the sequel!
I like how you took a mousy guy & made him important.
In future chapters, make them two things.
1. sex in every couple paragraphs.
2. Such the chapter can stand alone & have good DETAILED
sex with those involved but not have to read the other
chapters to see who they are.
Thanks.
Bob
WOW,
I'm overwhelmed by both the volume and positivity of all the responses this story has generated. Thank you all very much.
I do read all the comments here and respond to all the feedback emailed.
Not sure if this will turn into a series (I do have a couple of ideas of where it could go) but I appreciate the interest.
I'm always on the lookout for Beta readers, if anyone is interested. (Basically, need people to proofread to ensure spelling & grammar is correct and the story makes sense) So if that's of interest, send me an email via the feedback tab!
Thanks again, so glad this story has struck a chord with so many of you!
I believe this is not only a 5 star contest submission but one of the hottest stories I have read.
Thank You
Yeah, there needs to be more. And this story should win firat prize for sure.
This was short but really really enjoyable. It was easy to read, great visuals, and kept moving quickly! Please write more!!
Loved this one, Costume turned unknown extrovert impulses of introvert into reality.Having joined drama group,shy girl agrees to attend Halloween costume party, as superhero, assuming she'd be able to hide behind a mask.When not allowed to wear a mask,she approached shy short nerd , about characteristics of unknown female comic book heroine. discovering a new sexual self and a new lover. Sometimes we just need some help in letting our true selves emerge. One of best entries.
I hate Halloween, but your story made me want to dress up as a super hero!
Loved it!
I know this was a Halloween contest story, but you should continue the story. At least add one more for Saturday's Party, if not making this a small mini series.
He got it right the only way is just stick it up her and shot his cum deep up inside her unprotected pussy
I realize that you didn't have much time to really let us see shy Amanda, but I thought you did a very good job conveying that point during her exchange with Claire.
Wearing a costume, one that has that special something, can truly help one enhance some aspect of themselves, sometimes even discover a whole side of themselves that had only been daydreamed of. I think most of us have imagined being a super-hero of some sort. The tale you have shared with us is exciting, not only because you've told a hot, sexy story with a steamy sex scene, but because we could all relate to seeing our stranger side come out to play.
Great story! 5 stars; lots of fun, sexy and more
Just what I needed after a long day and disappointing evening.
This is only the second story of yours that I've read; looking forward to reading more!
Thanks for writing for us to enjoy!