All Comments on 'Halloween with Mom'

A Swallows and Amazons fan! Not that is a bad thing, just surprised to find the cast of the book here.

Enjoyed it, it read well, made sense, good.

Very well written with an ending that was just perfect.

I look forward to reading more of your work

The ending was classic, bravo!

Hope there's a part 2 cumming!

You need to wright another chapter to let us know how thing go now that John knows

that his mother now it was him.

And maybe bring 1 or both of his sister's into the fun.

That was very hot, I hope you write more about their relationship.

Please make her pregnant. He needs to drink mommy's milk. Fucking hot as fuck

I haven't read any of your stuff before.

This changes everything.

Very good lead up and realistic. If you need ideas for part II. I suggest that they keep it separate for a bit. Meet up for sex but at the same time be only suggestive at home. At least for one more story.

The twist was unique, believable, and portrayed very well. Thanks for sharing.

Editing critique: more attention to the adverb, noun and pronoun that all sound the same - too, two, & to.

Would love to read the follow up part 2. Great story

I hope that you do a follow up edition. I loved that he took her panties. Maybe put some panty play into the next and as I saw one reader write, maybe a pregnancy or hormone treatments so she could start milking.

Great story, very horny. I loved it. Will there be a follow up chapter I wonder? Hope so!

This needs a part 2 that picks up right where this one left off..

I really liked this story. 5*

We all need to pickup where u left off!!!! 8===D ----- (@)\|/(@)

Five Stars 5

I also vote for at least one more chapter? Excellent story line.

I agree that I'd like to read more, but I liked the ending so much I really want you to stop here....

Keep up the good work!

This story is riddled with missing words, spelling mistakes etc and there is hardly a mention.

I have always had the opinion that such mistakes are not that important if the story is good, and to be honest most of the time I don't notice the mistakes if the story sucks me in.

I find it surprising that I have noticed so many where nearly everyone else has not.

great story

Love, tenderness, devotion, and caring wrapped into one story.

Hope you have a another chapter planned.

Sooooo well done...hope there is a Ch. 02!

You can not leave me hanging! Well written and a good buildup.....but please, Chapter #2!!!

I would love to read next chapter, deepening in the relationship. There is a lot of Love there. Thanks

Pretty good job, despite the slight grammatical errors here and there. Is it safe to assume that there will be a chapter 2 in the near future? I'm really interested in seeing how Mary and John decide to handle this new aspect of their relationship.

That scene when he was dreaming had me in tears lol. I can tell that it is set up for another part. Good job so far.

Just to set up what comes next

I hope like others that chapter will be posted soon. I would like you to turn this into a series of stories please. Very good writing except a few minor errors here and there. No one is perfect after all. Thank you for sharing this story with us, please continue the story.

Please continue with this story....... I'm panting for more

Loved the story so far, hoping there will be more of it to cummmmm.

Please continue this. I need to know what happens

Too good I liked it...

Good story, good character development given how short it is and I really like the surprise ending...More, we need more of this particularly spicy variety...My compliments to the author!!!

and it worked out just as it should, including the surprise.

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I really like it. Very interesting. I wish something same happen with me.

chapter

I see someone's been reading swallows and Amazons recently then

Story: wonderful, wonderful... Hope there’s a chapter two.

Grammar: ugh

halloween is a great time to dress up as sexy as you want and pick up some hottie and have a ball, but having it with your mom is even better if you both dont know who you are. i have had almost the same experience with my mom, only she took me to our home and in the morning as i slept, she woke me with a blowjob. we spent the rest of the day mating, and i do mean mate, you see she became pregnant very soon and we went on to a very satisfying relationship started by the concieving of a daughter.

I absolutely LOVED this story . So ,hot, well thought out and bold! Five Big Stars , wish I could give it five more. New favorite story!

I read this some time ago and just recently found it again. I'm so glad I did, it is still a very hot story.

A bit obviuos, but good. Will read more of your work. Keep it up. Mom's note at end made me smile. Nice.

I figured out right away that it was mom/son BUT,,,,,the way you stretched it all was F...ing fantastic. Great job. Worth more than 5.

Excellent build up now the story needs to be continued.

There needs to be chapter 2

When is the next chapter?