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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous10/11/17

WOW

Definately different. Very well written and thoughtful. Possibly a continuation? I'd love to read more about this couple. Well deserved 5 stars.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Bets, that's all you got?

Last time it was truth or dare, now a bet. You're scraping the bottom of the barrel. Poker, truth or dare and bets. Some cliche ass shit, man.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Kind of wimpy and not much to it.

Probably the only non-willing cuckold story I've seen in a long time and I was hoping for more.

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by Highpike10/11/17

Really good

Very well crafted and written. Thank you. I am enjoying speculating on how Mary and Alison dealt with the events after their meeting with Henry.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Not good

The latest in a string of really bad misses. This guy really isn't much of a writer. He used to be weird, now just lame.

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by Pappy710/11/17

What happened to the rest of the body parts

from the other 3 guys who restrained him? I'm willing to bet that around here quite a few parts would detach from those three. And wife would be going to GA as a single woman. Not much room to come back from that kind of disrespect and disregard. I liked the story, even without my type of revenge, gave you a 5 as much for the fact that hubby wasn't a total wimp as for the story itself. Too bad he forgot his MMA training at the party.
Pappy

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by silentsound10/11/17

Started good, ended bad.

I really liked the plot but the repercussions and fallout were a very weak effort.

There would be murder and everyone would know what is coming if 3 guys tried to hold me down while my wife cheated on me!

Great start, shitty finish!

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by Crkcppr10/11/17

I was ready to come down like Thor's Hammer

Until the last sentence ! Nice save BG33 .
As some have noted , the rest of the group deserves some retribution , but in the real world that's hard to accomplish.
At least she did the one and probably only thing she could have done to make it , not right , it could never be , but at least give him a way to keep his own dignity and self respect. To me that is the most valuable thing a person can ever own in their life , all of life's joys spring from it . It seems to be in vogue now in this genre to diminish it's importance but to me it IS all important !
So , BG33 , this came to you while playing poker online eh ? Lil bit of self diagnosis perhaps ? Lol .
Enjoyed it , thanks for sharing.

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by 266xxyz10/11/17

Pretty well written

I"m pretty much with most other comments I've read. Great start bad finish. I'm not much of a RAAC fan and that is how I see the story. Thanks for the effort.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Ordinarily, I don't like reconciliation.

But this one was okay. She got her head on straight pretty quickly.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

1*

cuck shit.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Good start, lousy finish - as others have noted

Very lame excuse. Addiction to gambling does not force humiliation on her husband. No matter how addicted, how warped her thinking was, having other men hold her husband down and force him to watch makes the 'poor decision' completely unforgivable. All of which was conveniently ignored in the final scene. Zero, repeat, ZERO chance of reconciliation.

The ending is terrible, therefore. "I'm seeing a counselor - it wasn't my fault I was a slut and had you publically humiliated." "I understand, it's been a few months, let's get back together, no harm no foul."

The extremely lame last line revenge doesn't help. Sorry - you missed big time on this one.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Sorta interesting until the self-cuck at the end. That did not strike me as a woman who loved her husband, or was in the "early stages" of any sort of addiction. By the time she's giving blowjobs in front of friends and ordering her protesting husband to be held back, that's pretty far gone and betting the rent money would have come sooner than whoring herself.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Nice.

I assume the mugging of Mark was to appease the simple minds among the LW crowd. For me, it was not necessary, he just wasn´t important.

Good story, thanks for writing and sharing it.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Pathetic!

And, I DO mean PATHETIC. Cluck, cluck, cluck, cluck, cluck (and so forth).

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Idiotic!!!

A flimsy excuse and all is good!!?? How idiotic is that??!! I killed my neighbor but sorry i was weapons addicted!!?? Ha ha ha!!!

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by Anonymous10/11/17

only way this works is

if the deed was already done before he got there, the scene with her doing it in front of him was necessary for the plot/drama, but sadly made reconciliation a non-starter

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by Anonymous10/11/17

just...

Time was when, decades ago, when you had far greater chance of screwing a female than convincing her to give you a blow job. Most females refused to perform oral sex adamantly stating how disgusting it was.
Times change. The billy Clinton defense.
While I am overjoyed that blow jobs are so easily given now, seems strange that was is considered right and moral in this country has been defined by a serial cheater and seducer

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by Anonymous10/11/17

if you are going...

...to pay back Mark, the three guys who held you must also be tuned up...much more seriously tuned up.
If not for them, might be nothing happens that night in front of him.
No doubt, wife would have settled up another time and place, but he might not have found out. Imagine Mark would brag though.

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by gldngolfer10/11/17

What about...

The mugging of the three bastards that held him back? They deserved just as much!

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by Anonymous10/11/17

might benefit from a longer treatment

Pretty much what the others have said about the raac ending. I got the impression you just wanted a quick out for the story and this was the easiest way.

A longer treatment might be in order. Why did the other men in the room intervene against the husband, since they are all allegedly friends and why didn't the other wives jump in to put a stop to it, unless the whole thing was a setup to trap him in a group sex, wife swap thing? This 'we were in shock' explanation is so transparently untrue I again ascribe it to your haste to end the yarn. The blowjobee gets mugged we are told at the very end. What about the other guys and their marriages? The gambling whore wife is in therapy and doesn't play any more, but is everybody save the bloejobee still best pals?

Inquiring readers want to know!

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by lance_spearman10/11/17

Nicely done.

Good story.

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by sbrooks103x10/11/17

Mixed Feelings

Okay, before I get yelled at, I know this fantasy and is needed for the story, but settling up with the cash that the BJ represented is NOT welching!

First, this wasn't RAAC. In a RAAC there wouldn't have been a divorce. She had to earn her place back in his life.

My big problem is, "beginning stages of addiction" or no, insisting on giving the BJ over her husband's objections is really a bridge too far. In fact, that it was just the beginning stage of addiction makes it worse! She wasn't THAT addicted yet, so should have been able to say, "Sorry, guys, if you can't accept settling up with cash, then I guess I'm out of the game." I'm sure once things cooled down either she'd be back in the game, or the other wives would have pulled THEM out of the game.

If I'm forced to choose, I guess I'm okay with it for two reasons: One, she recognizes and is getting treatment for her addiction, apparently successfully, and more importantly, he LOVES her. To not take her back would hurt him at least as much as it hurts her.

I know people complain about "unfinished" stories, but I think I'd prefer it ended with them going out to dinner, leaving it up in the air whether they get back together or not.

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by Impo_6410/11/17

A very good short story...

A very good short story...Of course that poker game had a lot of consequences, but for the other people present...But that would be another story...For example the wives of the guys that hold him, must have though: What would happen if it was one of theirs husbands to win that hand? But this was about those two not about the all bunch...4*

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by LordSlamdawgg10/11/17

Talented Author Discards Arcadian Introduction & Conventional Storytelling in Favor of Leading Right in with Stomach Roiling Showdown ( to Mixed Results ) .

There are a couple beautifully written scenes in this story. BigGuy33 does a little Tarentino-esque storytelling in terms of opening with battle of wills ( and ethics ) with wife blithely paying lost game of cards with oral favors over husband's fervent attempts at intervention. This hooked average reader from the getgo.

My main qualm is the story's minimalist word count didn't allow for true character development . The author chose to let the story be told with the players' action/reactions landmarking each of the scenes .

I admired the closing reveal scene where Katie acknowledges how she lost her way and the countermeasures taken not to relapse. The reconciliation makes sense for readers with optimism in human nature and doesn't for those of Old Testament mindset . I personally didn't care for beating of Mark, but this got lowly footnote status. The author's heart clearly wasn't in featuring felony level retribution .

:The story is purposefully disjointed due to minimal background and character setting . Yet the opening and closing scenes are memorable and affecting as isolated mini-tableaus. This isn't a full symphony of story , that wasn't the author's goal..

If however BigGuy33 wanted two memorable highlights ( scenewise) to cut and paste in readers' imagination in same way ESPN Sportscenter distills multple hour football game by distilling contest to a few minutes of prime action, he suceeded in my humble opinion.

I thank the author for sharing.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

WIMP

Henry,wake up,her friends&blowjobs is more important to her then you will ever be. take your lost in move on

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by Anonymous10/11/17

5!! HEY ANNONY

your dumb ass comments are as useful as tits on a bull. You're a drop of piss in a bowl of shit!! Go fuck your self

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Silly

This could have been a fun and lighthearted story. It is, after all, JUST A BLOWJOB. Jesus, people, grow up. Mouth + cock isn't the end of the world. Instead of fun and lighthearted, you took it in the same tired old direction as so many other stories: brainless wife doesn't realize her husband is freaking out about it and does it anyway, divorce, begging for forgiveness, etc., etc..

In the end, this isn't a story about a husband and wife, but about a man and his dog. Dog pisses on the rug, man smacks dog across the nose with a folded up newspaper, dog behaves. Good dog. Good dog. How erotic!

Then to top it off, the guy who received the BJ gets assaulted. Because...well, that's all part of the formula. At least crackcopper liked it. Sick fucker.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Expected?

This story was better than expected with the later part of this short story. Cathy did something very stupid and his "friends" did let her get away with it and physically prevented him from stopping her. The discussion with Mary and Alison was insightful but my major criticism (that keeps this from being as much as a 5) is that there was very little development to put any of this in context.

Tiny Tim

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by muncher35410/11/17

Can't do it.

Can't in good conscience rate a story well, in which every character has a warped perception of what a blowjob is.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Silly

Sometimes "the end of the world," Is "the end of the marriage." And What was done in that kitchen most likely would end a marriage. The end of this story took 4 points off the top right away. so It got its proverbial wimpy one star.

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by magmaman10/11/17

I kind of liked this one

Everyone has limits, and the line about people getting addicted is a good one, since it is true. People can become addicted to about anything, for some it is just food, for some it's drugs, gambling is a huge one actually even worse than some drugs.
People can become addicted to collecting trinkets, no end to it.
Theft, illicit sex, even murder, it has happened due to an obsession. For many that come here to read, the addiction is sex.
So as silly as this one might sound to someone not addicted to something, it really is a possible scenario.
Not exactly erotic, but well written. I liked the way the forgiveness was written, also possible.
A dab of revenge later harmed nothing, a FRIEND would never have allowed what the "Mark" character did, and real friends would not have restrained a man dealing with his wife.. I would have been tempted to have done similar myself...to ALL of them!
So, top marks from this old man!
Thanks,
MGM

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Realism

What bothers me most about stories like this is it's so unrealistic it's impossible to suspend my disbelief enough to enjoy the story. Can anyone here imagine anything like this happening in real life? Has anyone even heard of anything like this happening through second-hand sources?

An otherwise faithful wife insists on giving a BJ to pay a gambling debt?

The wife doesn't understand why her husband is mad about it?

The friends physically restrain the husband?

Seriously, that whole scenario is too ludicrous even for fiction. That makes the rest of the story irrelevant.

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by HankWTullamore10/11/17

Good, not very good

Too much suspension of disbelief required for the story to unfold. No possibility of reconciliation, no possibility of avoiding immediate injury to prevent the bj.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

re:anonymous- 5 Hey Annony

You mean like yours? You're the expert at absurd comments. Go fuck yourself. Oh, wait, you already did.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

We never see any back story that could possibly make the wife

think that her husband would be okay with her sucking off a guy, especially in front of friends. For most married couples, that's a huge assumption, unless their history or conversations indicate it would be tolerated. It's hard to imagine a wife would assume that blowing a random guy would be okay with her husband, never mind because of a bet and in front of friends. His reaction was believable. Her actions were not.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

At least

one story saved the day! I liked this story. It was incomparably better than the others.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

I thought it was an interesting hypothesis.

Of course it required a lot of contrivance to setup the situation, but it was short and to the point. Kind of a, What would YOU do setup as a point of discussion. Which we now see taking place in these comments.

After you get past the actual blow job scene, the rest was reasonable and appropriate. She indicated complete disrespect and abandonment of her marriage commitment, so the marriage was ended. She realized her psychological problem and sought help and treatment. They both realized their friends were not friends, and ended those relationships as well. She owned her failure, her problem, expressed her regret and remorse, and appeared to be ready and willing to accept the consequences as determined by the man she betrayed.

What the author did not include was the details of their reconciliation. I think it is also reasonable to assume the ex-wife made the personality and intellectual changes needed to reestablish herself as a viable marriage partner, at least for the next guy. So her ex-husband decided to be her first candidate to be the next guy. And who would be more cautious and careful than him in assessing her growth and recovery from her previous dysfunction? On the one hand he's taking a big risk. On the other hand he already knows her potential. Who is stronger, a person who has never failed, or a person who has successfully recovered and learned from failure?

I don't think there is an absolute right or wrong choice in this story regarding their reconciliation. I also think the more interesting part of the story is what transpired between them when they started dating again, then remarried. But that's not this author's story, here. Maybe later it could be.

Thanks for a thought provoking and intriguing story. And thank you for allowing anonymous comments. Well done.

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by DrKenStone10/11/17

Gambling

A gambling addiction just can't be cured. My brother's wife was an addict. There is nothing he could do to stop her. It ruined her marriage, she lost her son in the divorce, and 30 yrs later still suffers.

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by ejsathome10/11/17

I liked it, but . . .

. . . it seemed awfully similar to Tx Tall Tales "It Was Only a Blowjob." However, I do appreciate your writing and your effort. Thanks very much. 4*

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by Anonymous10/11/17

sorry

A divorce is a divorce - that means a separation and a goodbye! Maybe - after 10 years or so you can come back - but not right after. Didn't work for me.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

This SUCKS

This story is a real piece of shit! I would have liked it better if she had gotten him to suck the cock for her!

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by Anonymous10/11/17

dumb fuck!!!

the guy was a dumb fuck. his wife was an even dumber fuck. this is a dumb fucking story.

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by Rhomanov10/11/17

***

Not a bad plot just that the writing was far too dry and predictable.
Blow Job Bet > It’s Just a BJ > Leaving > Divorce > Excuses > Reconnect > Remarry.
😕

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by AyreGuard10/11/17

Some good, some bad.

The obvious good is the accuracy and description of addiction and the husbands reaction. This is a flash story and some details got lost in the translation. The bad is the husband misusing the term love. Let me explain. As an English professor, love is a verb and something one does. She humiliated him and defended her decision. To make this good into great, you needed to admit that he no longer loved her, but for his own sake, needed to learn how to forgive her. What semi-worked is her repentence and admission at the end. She never really apologized. If this is what you are implying then either your characters and/or this story is shallow.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

dumb

look this was just stupid. his wife would have to be brain dead to think like this. not to mention his so called friends restraining him. please in real life no fucking way. the first one to walk up would be spitting out teeth. would his "friends " really be willing to actually fight him once he started punching. hell no they would only be halfway into stopping him anyway, once he showed he was willing to hurt someone they would back off. what about the other wives, are they okay with their slut friend blowing their husbands also. just another stupid ass story trying to bend reality just to humiliate the husband. the only thing missing his JPB having the husband get turned on watching.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

usually

i like your stories but this was very dumb only people who have an I.Q, of a turnip or voted for donald trump act this way.

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Good quick hitter.

Well written, concise view of an addiction. Although I'm not a big RAAC person, in this case I was happy to see them remarry. I would have liked for a couple of her so-called friends wives to have divorced their husbands. The last sentence was nicely done. Thanks for the story.
4 stars

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by bruce2210/11/17

Very Good Story

I agree there were a lot of alternative possibilities for the ending, but it reminds me of the O Henry tales and brings some important ideas to our attention. The most important is that gambling is an addiction and like any other addiction can lead to the destruction of people and their families. I have seen this in person..

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by foolscap10/11/17

All the alleged "addiction" in the world can't justify the betrayal and stab in the back.

""No, Henry! If I welch on a bet I won't be allowed to play anymore!

"I don't care, Cathy! You're not doing it!"

I tried to grab her again but she moved and escaped my grasp. Frankly, I was getting pretty pissed that she was fighting me on this. Why in the hell was it so damned important? It was like she was intent on humiliating me. And then the final thrust was made.

"Guys, help me out here."

Before I could figure out what in the hell that meant the other 3 guys grabbed a hold of me and pulled me away from her, holding me still. I'm no slouch but neither were they and there were 3 of them. I continued to struggle while begging, yes begging, Cathy to please stop.

"I'm sorry, honey, but I made the bet and now I have to honor it."

I caught the slight smile on Mark's face as Cathy again took her knees in front of him and wrapped her hand around it. I hoped for a little help from the ladies but they all seemed to want to see this happen as well. I was running at the mouth trying desperately to stop her. I'd manage to get an arm free only to be held back until one of the guys got my arm under control again. But I continued to fight, until the moment when all the fight left me."

Fortunately for Cathy hubby is a simp and a sap (and a sexual masochist). The end of the story left me cold. The core issues were not addressed. The old "it's only a blowjob" and "it's only sex" tropes only underscore the problem that was NOT addressed. He doesn't "love" her, he is irretrievably co-dependent.

I can't say it was well written because the premise is absurd. Many here will really like it and that's sad on so many other levels.

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