All Comments on 'Mark and Mary Ch. 01'

I couldn't get past the first 2 paragraphs

I didn't get much further. I can't really offer much as far as constructive suggestions...not trying to be an ass, it just isn't very good. Maybe in a hurry?

Abysmal lack of punctuation mixed with crude language even by Literotica standards. "Cunt"? "Faggot"? Who gets off wading through this crap?

Comments good or bad are welcome, however am left wondering why you hide your identity. The only identifiable comment has not written anything !