All Comments on 'Looking Up'

nice one. wish there was more to this one

I wish one time in my life that fantasy could be real.

Five Scary Stars

and then he was, what can happen with the rest of his existence/// TK U MLJ LV NV

Entertaining and well written

short story.

I think you'd be a good BTB

writer, Ahazura, lol.

No need to kill to BTB.

A healthy dose of humiliation

is usually much more satisfying.

I like your style Ahaz.

Hope to see more of your good work.

"Not the demon you're looking for." Ha! Those Guatemalan whorehouses! You're a hoot, Ahaz. Nice job. Thanks, Randi.

A very funny story...a good entry to "Halloween contest" and also a "save the day" story...4*

Violence aganist women, hurting people, and thats funny and erotic???

Real men just get a divorce!!!!!!

Well , it's getting close to that time of year ! ( even though it's still in the 80's everyday here ??? )

Time for the spooks ( the other kind Todd172 , lol ) and goblins to run amok and do their evil bidding !

This was a fun story in the great Lit history of great LW Halloween yarns! ( I guess anon's not familiar with this tradition ) .

Enjoyed it greatly , thanks for sharing.

5 *'s

I'll bet the "sick fetish" guy is really popular at parties. Nice little story. You got into the spirit of things pretty well! Full marks.

This was a nice Halloween read. Interesting nuances in demonology and a bit of karma, good and bad, for everyone involved. Enjoyed this one.

UM, how was he able to cut his hands free tied behind his back before Mike could get to him?

Happy Halloween 🎃!

He's married to a female goatse and doesn't notice until big Mike makes him munch on a creampie?

Ok, sure. You're trying for humor and that's funny. It's not funny in the way you're going for, but damned hilarious that you think it is.

A fun story! Sometimes a bit of fantasy, whatever the type, can be good fun. This story was one such. Nice job Ahazura.

Tiny Tim

I liked the concept and thought Ahazura channeled the demon rationale and character quite well. There wasn't any dramatic tension or significant opposition to incubus once he was unbound , but humor, boldness and amusing supernatural backstory made this a smooth read . The imp went General Patton / Ghengis Khan through any and all hapless reprobates.

Props to author who made me nostalgic for Buffy Vampireslayer series because both slickly intertwined underworld, ancient, unholy mythos to deceptive mask of order most of us wishfully ascribe to humdrum, workaday backdrop and invest banal hopes dreams and 401k plans to.

I thank Ahazura for sharing.

Ahaz,

Thanks for providing a really funny story. It's a great little pre-Halloween tale, and I agree with a previous poster, the demon's characteristics were great. Easily a 5* from me, was a very welcome Monday morning laugh. Thanks for sharing, my friend!

RNebular

Take idea and blow it up till it's absurd. Then sit back and watch or in this case read and laugh.

.when you write a btb you actually burn the bitch and bastard.

.....but I was thoroughly entertained!!! A nice pleasant diversion and a good lead in to Halloween!

****

Keep us in the line!!!

An excellent start for the coming Halloween season. Your mix of supernatural, humor, and generally good writing made this an entertaining read for me.

5 stars and thank you for writing.

Clever and funny, thanks very much!

It was an OK story, but so wrong of a category. If you really wanted an LW entry for Halloween you should have crafted the events so that the outcome was similar, but no genies or witches and other Fantasy characters. How about it turns out Mikey is really superstitious, and Dave just accidentally scares the bully into driving his car of a cliff, with Melissa in it?

Anyway, thanks for the effort. Even if it was wrong.

Really liked this BTB story. forget the Whiners saying it shouldn't be in Loving Wives. I thought it was Excellent esp. when Mike and the Bitch were buried and Consumed by the Flames.

Nice job. Writing the incomprehensible is damn hard. And PoV for a demon - stuff of nightmares, both unknowable and unnameable, I don't think even HP Lovecraft tried that. Very entertaining though.

Thanks for the story.

it was rushed, and could've done with a little more fleshing out, but I liked it.

if you could, get in touch. I've got a 'demon' story that you might enjoy writing with me, i'm in need of a darker soul character and you seem rather good at that

JC

wrong cat.

Pure unadulterated rubbish.4896

You seriously messed up Miami's batting order by roasting the leagues foremost slugger. He goes by Giancarlo but used to be Mike. Would have enjoyed a longer visit to the Halloween party and learn a bit more about the coven but this was a fun read. 5 demonic stars and good luck in the contest.

It was a very different kind of Loving Wives story and it worked very well.

This really had “moments.” Fun read and original. Five stars. Thanks for writing.

This was an interesting story--a little hard to read, but strangely compelling. I, particularly liked the demon's peering into the wife's mind and seeing that she really loved Dave, and thought she was proving it by giving him what he needed. We rarely get insights into the adulteress' mind in BTB stories. Good job.

demon = fantasy category.

Was a fun read. Thanks for you time .

Thank you for writing this story for all of us.

Keep up the good work.

Keep it going. I truly enjoyed it.

Not for me.

First, this story belong to sci-fi & fantasy not here.

Second, when you started whith the whole warlock mumbo jumbo i lost interest. It's like when you play a game in God's mode. There is no game anymore. He had all the power in the world so no real plot left. It wasn't even the husband who got the revenge.

Third. The revenge was rahter dissapointing. With all the power he had the only thing he could do was dig a hole and burn them? Talk about wasting powers,

1 star for me

But you rushed through like you needed to do a piss. Next story, take time to empty your bladder before you write a story.

I got no picture of anyone, anyplace or anyevent. Your words should take us into the story, not just itemise things.

Enjoyed it, thanks for posting. A strange kind of BTB story, but it's nice to read something a little different. Thanks again.

I hope you find the inspiration to give us a new installment of that soon.

Don't mess with Dave. This is every poor wimp 's dream come true..

GREAT

Thanks. It was great.

jtaylor

but it is that time again.

Anyway, not sure "Dave" as demonic supervillian/id of the LW category is public domain... kinda like if you put a possessed Mustang in it or something.

Still, pretty high on the pickax handle count, and the mega-asshole as demon strikes true. Now if you only gave him a smaller than average penis... (and the demon didn't do Anna? How very odd...)

Not my favorite, to be honest, but I'm glad you got this one out of you.

Green-something

(yes, yes... I'm an asshole. But being upfront about being an asshole makes me not an asshole, right?)

More, more, more

Gratuitous violence isn't sexy. Too much to make it enjoyable. Unnecessary to the story.

brilliant 5*

I read the story and it was pretty good. Well written, no glaring grammatical errors, and it flowed very well. I just didn’t like it because I don’t care for hocus pocus supernatural bullshit. Those fantasies were cool when I was ten, but that was a long time ago. I wish all the writers here on Literotica would resist the urge to write stories about nonsensical supernatural entities, but if they have to do so they should at least post them in the correct category. And that would be “Fantasy”.

Different which is fun (to me). I'd like to see some more along this line where it's Fantasy content with an LW story.

Because this was just nucking futs.

One of my favorite LW supernatural stories and the first one I ever read from Ahasura.

Not “Yeah” but Hell Yeah!!! Five*****

my only wish was that he buried them alive. but we can't be picky. he absorbed their essence like food. not their bodies, their souls. that was a nice touch.

Haven't read one like it before. I really got off on the BTB aspect- literally, BTB. I give you 10 stars. ( some people may know I can't count. ) The Bear approves.

The BEAR

I would love to see more about Dave and Jerdal{?}

Good fun!

Once more, getting ready for a quarantined Halloween as I have a positive test and a fever. Wish I had a demon.

Best BTB ever. Still not prove demons are in earth. But if it is, I wish the demons to punish all whores and bullies.

Ahhh, the simple pleasures in life.

Loved it!

Fun story, I was smiling all the way through it

I’d like to see more from these characters

5stars. That was a lot of fun. I'm not into duck stories at all. The beginning almost made me sick. But, the story redeemed itself quite well.

Haha. A true BTB story. I wish you would continue it as a series. What fun.

Excellent! Sequels would be very cool. Thanks!

Supernatural btb was a fun treat. Thanks. 5/5

Nato_

Absolutely enjoyed this piece, great work.

Very good, and turning it into a series would be appreciated.

Great Halloween fun! Loved it!

Most people, including the author, will never realize how close to reality this story is

Thank you for adding a twist to the normal BTB. Very entertaining, and riveting. 5 stars!

A fun reaad!! Thans!

The more I read the more I want to read.

The dark side—too bad they want the black side of the force of this universe. I find the bright side much more enjoyable. Good job. May you see the true depth of the dark side. It is not a laughing matter. Oh, just kidding.