Stop It!

your poem

has been mentioned in todays reviews

Well, stop it yourself!

I don't get this: No hips for my tongue to brush my lips o'er;

I get "no hips for my tongue" and I get "no hips to brush my lips o'er." But the way it's written doesn't quite make sense. Maybe: No hips for my tongue, none to brush my lips o'er.

*no thermometer rating and I'm not purposely spacing between my letters. It's literotica!

You're right. Need to remember to proof one last time before clicking "SUBMIT"...I was picturing and thinking one thing and typing something else, apparently. Will have to make a Revision.

Don't Stop

I also saw the err mistake, but i still understood the poem and where it was going. It was great and i really enjoyed it..

Loved it!

I love the dramatic pausing! Very well done!