by Willow Rain
but a couple of line breaks and some seriously missing punctuation made it harder to hear than it needed to be. Consider dropping the initial caps, and reworking the punctuation at bit. Your poem deserves it.
Still, a nice read.
It deserves a little more work.
*no thermometer rating
But prehaps adding some punctuation to this piece would help the flow. I love the free verse and the imaginary was excellent! Thanks for the read, Dana