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by jd4george10/22/04

I found this to read quite well...

but a couple of line breaks and some seriously missing punctuation made it harder to hear than it needed to be. Consider dropping the initial caps, and reworking the punctuation at bit. Your poem deserves it.

Still, a nice read.

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by Tathagata10/22/04

your poem

has been mentioned in today review

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by WickedEve10/22/04

This definitely has potential

It deserves a little more work.

*no thermometer rating

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by DanaQt10/22/04

I enjoyed this very much...

But prehaps adding some punctuation to this piece would help the flow. I love the free verse and the imaginary was excellent! Thanks for the read, Dana

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