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by Maria239410/26/04

if you put

bi-polar in the title, you can bet I will read it ;)

you have a good rhythm going and it seemed like you were intending to rhyme throughout and then didnt..the only thing I have a question about though, is the word "matting"

did you mean "mating"?

overall, I did enjoy this poem

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by DanaQt10/26/04

Enjoyable read

This was simple and to the point. Loved it. The rhymes were great and didn't seem forced. Almost "similar sounding" but not exact. Terrific!

"no care of the place, or who’s watching, either"- I don't think you needed these commas here. Especially before the word "either". The flow was great in this piece and I very much enjoyed. I don't know- I sorta got a giggle. Probably due to the rhymes.

Thanks for the great read, Dana

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by tazz31709/02/12

IS THE PERSON ELATED OR RELATED

to a changing lifestyle from within, TK U MLJ LV NV

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