I had to stop reading because the sounds were so silly. Things like n-g-g-g-g-g-g just take you out of the story. I think if the story were edited to remove those long sounds with something more realistic or even better just the character's thoughts without those sounds at all, the story would be a lot better.
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wish i was her!!!
I had to stop reading because the sounds were so silly. Things like n-g-g-g-g-g-g just take you out of the story. I think if the story were edited to remove those long sounds with something more realistic or even better just the character's thoughts without those sounds at all, the story would be a lot better.
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