All Comments on 'Aloneness'

for stanza one:

Aloneness

in crowds

in couples

inescapable

Would that work? I like it better trimmed down.

*no thermometer rating

sound and a sort of mirror in a mirror thing going on in your head, but there is a tenderness/fear interplay that I really enjoy in this.

I love this, Tung- alone being my favorite state. I would just rethink the 2 times you use 'among'. To me thats a plural word if that makes sense, and I felt you were talking about 1 person. Yes? No? Thanks, baby!

Just to let you know I came, I saw, I voted. Nice one,tt2u. I gave it 5.

This is very good, tt2u. Profound. Made me think :)

You have an excellent way with words! Well Done!

Nicely done expressions of sentiments;

How incomplete you are by yourself until joined with the other,

And even in a crowd, without that other, you remain alone.

A blissful state ~ the willing prisoner of the one you love.