All Comments on 'Bambi's Tears'

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Consider this:

"forever

down

a country road."

or even leaving "a country road" off

But when I read it, the power and pacing of the images got a little chopped up with the short lines. What would happen if you let the lines break a little more naturally?

Tender images in this MET. Very well done.

you really can write poetry. This really has some good stanzas at the beginning but near the end, it needs a little work. Still, this is good.

You wrote a GOOD poem with a BAD title. The title sounds sappy. Yes, I'm picking at your title and it's because you wrote a good poem, so give it a good title. :)

I live close to the Smokey Mountains.. have all my life.. I can see this as clear as a picture window..Beautiful, Artful.. Keep'm coming.. Loved this one.. I agree with the needs a new title..Artful poem like this, no Bambi here..Is still a great poem~~!!!!!

I've lived in a place where there were tons of deer and this really does happen a lot. I have to say that I almost didn't read this because of the title. So, I agree with who ever suggested that you might want to re name this.

very well done my love

Your words painted a beautiful picture for the words you so greatly use.

Thank you

A really good one with a powerful image of a fawn staying by the side of its dead mother; minor typos need fixing but mostly I agree with other comments about changing the title.

A beautiful poignant rendering that rushes along to a sad conclusion. Beautifully written.

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