All Comments on 'Annie's Yuletide Gamble'

I really tried to read this, but gave up before I got to the end of the first page. I hope it was good for somebody. Just too much dragging dialog.

I thought the story was great, although it did take some reading to get to the juicy (pun intended) parts. Erotic for sure.

I'm not usually one to criticize style, but this was almost unreadable. Too many apostrophes, ellipses, unnecessary emphasis, stuck key exclamations. We know what a drunk person with an accent sounds like, you don't have to force us to parse that word salad. Tighten that shit.

It's strange I'd have to tell this to an author with so much experience, but how did this get through editing?

Incredibly erotic

That was horrible grammar. Had to stop reading early on bc just annoying.

Love the Eggnog Family fun.

Well that was a different verse of Oh come all ye faithful. Heee heee

Could that be a new Christmas tradition? OOhh I would pay good money to see that video .

Well I understood what you meant , That's what it was like in the 90's in a lot of places , speech from another time . It was not Grammatically incorrect.

Enjoyable, sexy and fun

Thank you

Jc