All Comments on 'L’Hotel Belevedere'

But the "story" seemed incomplete. I wanted a denouement... perhaps someting as simple as "Don't you smell it?". After the aside (I know better), being set apart and therefore made important, I wanted the poem to answer whether he was right, or not.

or it's my mood or the rain outside, but I like this poem. I like all your poetry. I really like this one. "So breath(e) deeply"

all consumed with setting the stage, getting the place "ready"? I like the scene, and her intent on keeping it her way, it is done, isnt it? :)

Wonderful images thoughout, and I'll give a 5 anybody that knows what an alembic is! Such a beautiful treatment of jaded hope.

I was a little distracted by your mechanics; sometimes punctuation and capitalization is used, sometimes not.

This poem is reviewed in the New Poems thread.

that I think you're a genius (but you know I think that, so don't make a federal case, lol). And of a whole five of a poem, this is the fivest part:

Esperanza

who burns incense

to some god of love

meets me in the lobby.

“Love is in the air,” she says.

I know better.

Down in the basement

I’ve built an alembic

of glass and fire

to distill love from ardor.

In the dark it glows

with amorous intent

and rumbles needy

but all I get

is the crust of lust

and whiffs of desire.

because I understand it completely. I understand it the way you meant it when you wrote it. But you knew that, too.

Quite a piece of work!