All Comments on 'Deudae'

Too hard to follow as it jumps around, presumably between then and now.

You were never a " good writer once" , at least not in English, which clearly is not your native language. The story needs editing as there are just too many inconsistencies and grammar errors. e.g. this sentence makes no sense - "Standing at least leg taller than everyone"

Even your opening sentence "Long story short, [use] to be a pretty good writer" is incorrect.

The use of "piqued" is incorrect both times. It is a verb describing a feeling or arousing interest, it has nothing to do with speaking. Perhaps you meant to use "piped" which would be appropriate for the 10 year old but not the Queen, who because she is the Queen, would have "interrupted".

It is unclear at the beginning, if the person of interest is "Ujae" or "Lo-aur".

Aside from all that, I think you have some good story ideas so it will be interesting to see how it goes forward.