by mcfbridge
Surely this cannot be the end of such a sweet romance?
Glad to see I can keep on reading the next chapters. LOL
I couldn't feel their chemistry. It was as if they were two strangers. You might want to go more in depth next time. But other than that, your vocabulary is good.
My thoughts on this part are ; It felt rushed. There was opportunity for a build up of tension, but it was missed. However, it may well be that there is a plan in all of this and it is certainly not a big issue.