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My Wife is a HO-HO-HO

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by Anonymous

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Almost had a damned good story going but you blew it.

# 1. Your kids must have started fucking when they were twelve or thirteen, without using condoms or b.c. pills for you to have that gang of ten grand kids after 20 yrs. of marriage.
# 2. You only outlined the story without getting around to TELLING it... and then left us wondering.... WTF???!! while you were motoring away.

I just read the outline to an unwritten story.

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by Crkcppr11/22/17

Fun lil Christmas Flash story

As others have noted , you needed to add 10 more years to their marriage ( typo maybe ?) and then have the kids having covered for her ( or some other device ) to explain their lumps of coal they got to share with their Mother .
I did like the Grinch references , harkens me back to my youth .
Overall , I liked it , just a few blemishes on an otherwise nice seasonal post !

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by WhoGivesAShit11/23/17

The Perfect Gift!

Just thinking what a fly on the wall observed when the envelopes were opened. Hilarious!

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by Magicidan11/23/17

CORRECTION

As has been pointed out by several readers, there is a chronological typo in my story. The McMillans have actually been married 31 years, seven months, two weeks, four days, and six hours. In fact, Carole was five months pregnant with twins as she walked down the isle. Problem solved.

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by Ruttweiler11/23/17

What an asshole to screw up everyone’s Christmas.

‘nuff said.

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by ohyessssss11/26/17

Bad timing

How could you possibly leave before everyone opened their envelopes. The look on their faces would have been worth the price of admission.

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by IndyOn11/27/17

Huh!

You can't possibly leave the story here??
More?

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by BrianBender12/27/17

Great Story, but...

What a great story, but I think it should have been the final chapter in a longer story. Please accept this as constructive criticism, not just criticism. I would really enjoy a longer story with this as a fabulous ending. Thanks.

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by NATHANBRITTLES01/06/18

Seeking revenge on the wife I understand...

BUT he really hurt his children and grandchildren unnecessarily. His family didn't cheat on him, so why cause such hurt especially on Christmas Eve? The damage would be irreparable

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by Samuel_T_Cogsley01/22/18

Love it! Burn'em all to the ground IN CHAPTER 2 DAMN IT!

All right; you've got a good chapter 1. Now in chapter 2 you need to expand it; how the adults dealt with it, how the children are now angry at Santa and at their mother. How the inlaws are furiously pissed off at their daughter because of the pictures. And of course, the lawsuit against the company, and the fallout from his upcoming divorce- and firing- for sexual harassment. This is why I'm only giving you 2 out of 5 stars- when you do chapter 2, and end it better, then I'll give that one 5 stars.

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by sas644602/06/18

UGH!!!!

UNFINISHED!!!! Not enjoyable when you leave it hanggin' like this!

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by penneydog5503/24/18

I

Will agree with many of the Commenter's remarks! This definitely could use another chapter or two! We now have a Xmas Bitch Burn ! Love the Santa Bit! Yeah it's a Xmas they won't forget? Anyway that's my comment Thanks 5★ WOOF!
Oh I don't know if I made a comment Previously nor do I care! See Ya!

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by Tiger2703/29/18

HO!

A couple more paragraphs of epilogue would do!!!

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by CaOldDog04/10/18

Creative

Wife yes - kids no!

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by Samuel_T_Cogsley04/17/18

It's been almost 3 months since my last comment

OK- Imagine the sequel is called "My Wife's Boss at Valentines Day". 7 weeks have passed and the Wife's Company, and the Wife's boss are both given lawsuits- to be served on Valentines day. Cindy Lou Who is sitting in the corner, bewildered why her Boss is being escorted out of the building by security. The "Grinch" who is the process server is having a field day; delivering Lawsuits to the Owner, to the Boss's Manager, to a few co-workers to be subpoena'd as witnesses....As Mercury Outboard Motors said in the 1960's- "The Payoff is Performance!"

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by joln32108/21/18

So what really happens... Trent goes and see's a lawyer and sues him for video taping him without his permission. The divorce of his wife blows up in his face. Instead of getting a divorce, the guy is facing a huge lawsuit and his wife says; Go ahead and Divorce me and you'll be the most sorrowful man on skid-row. Then reminds him of all the past due bills she paid for which would have put the family out on the street... The Divorce doesn't go through. Instead, he is bewildered at how his attempt at revenge backfired so badly....

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by 26thNC08/29/18

Mad

Everyone is pissed at him for spoiling Christmas, but what about the bitch who destroyed a marriage?

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by sas644609/02/18

UGH!!!!!

NOT ENOUGH AND CERTAINLY NOT FINISHED!

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by Samuel_T_Cogsley11/16/18

I wish I'd given it a 5 instead of a 3

This story just screams for a second chapter where the reactions of the family each discuss the shitstorm approaching from the North.

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