Why shy away from the actual sex? This could have been quite erotic, now the reader has to fill in the sex in his mind. Personally, I don't want to work that hard! Good luck!
The mastery here is that in 1400 words, you've implied 14,000 (maybe 140,000).
Not merely that last 'present', but what in hell this guy's done over the years to generate such affection and lust - whilst, and I'm convinced from what was there that he did, staying faithful to his wife. (Though, of course, 'being faithful' might have meant a more complex relationship than is often taken as the only meaning of that phrase.)
Except for the fact that this is so perfect as a cameo, I'd love to read the full-length novel.
Perhaps (thinking of the 'collection of stories' structure of Flawed Red Silk), you might treat us to some of the prequels?
English
Og, this is really a SHORT story!
Where's the signature verbosity? Five-bombing you so I can win the coveted last place prize. (I did enjoy the story, too!)
Short and sweet...
or was it sweet -n- low...
nursery santa...could have gone so many different ways..
original concept and an endearing tale
good luck and happy Holidays
Art~
I loved it...
Just the right mixture and I used my imagination about the present he gave her. Good luck Ogg!
Cookies and milk
Thanks for further enabling my sick santa fetish, lol. -Scarlett
Sweet!
And just short enough to avoid cuming down her chimney.
No wonder I didn't get my two front teeth...
...that sorry old Santa was fooling around with the boss and all the hired help. A fun, imaginative read.
Rumple
Good, but....
Why shy away from the actual sex? This could have been quite erotic, now the reader has to fill in the sex in his mind. Personally, I don't want to work that hard! Good luck!
More!
More, more, more! C'mon, Og! Pretty-please?
I hated the....
fact that I didn't get to sit on Santa's lap. Short and delightful to read.
Sweet as candy!
What a short sweet little read. I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing with us!
Nice...
take on the old Santa Grotto! Are you appearing locally? xx
OHhhh Santa Claus!!!!!!
That was absolutely gorgeous!!!!!!
Made me all warm and fuzzy inside.... GREAT job!!!
And what a merry christmas he had, I'm sure lol ;-)
Beautifully written
This story is beautifully written and with an excellent mixture. Keep up the good work.
Like radio, the special effects were the best!
The mastery here is that in 1400 words, you've implied 14,000 (maybe 140,000).
Not merely that last 'present', but what in hell this guy's done over the years to generate such affection and lust - whilst, and I'm convinced from what was there that he did, staying faithful to his wife. (Though, of course, 'being faithful' might have meant a more complex relationship than is often taken as the only meaning of that phrase.)
Except for the fact that this is so perfect as a cameo, I'd love to read the full-length novel.
Perhaps (thinking of the 'collection of stories' structure of Flawed Red Silk), you might treat us to some of the prequels?
Eff
anticlimatic
This is a site about sex not about teasing
Erotica
This is a great example of EROTIC writing. Unfortunately, "anonymous" doesn't get that concept. Keep it up.
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