Vickie, The Baby & Me

Another possible ending...

While I loved this story, it could have yet another better ending....Invite Roger's wife over and give her the full scoop of what happened and then under threat of him not ever being able to impregnate or fuck Vickie again, encourage his wife to allow you to begin fucking her for the simple enjoyment of plain fucking, with the possibility of the 4 of you adults beginning to live together nude under one roof with Roger impregnating both women simultaneously while you fuck them just for infertile sex. Both you and Roger could contribute to the 2-couple "marriage" economically and even the babies born to this "union" could grow into fucking each other and their 'mommies" and daddies".

Great

You covered all the bases. All the endings were quite possible.

I'm sure each reader liked the ending that was right for their own personal tastes.

I liked the ending in "C"

Opinions are just like assholes. we all have one. lol


I liked your disclaimer at the start of the story. The part about the colons, semi colons, etc. etc. Those types should go teach a creative writing class at a university, and leave us perverts alone.

Excellent writing. I certainly enjoyed the story, and I thank you for your effort.

Gary

SIR FORGIVE ME FOR MY NEGATIVE COMMENTS

I WAS TRYING TO GET THE TRUE WRITER OUT OF YOU,I'M A FAN OF YOURS.THIS STORY IS ONE OF THE BEST YOU HAVE WROTE AND THE INSIDE OF YOU CAME TO THE FRONT.I AGAIN AM SORRY I OFFENDED YOU WITH MY COMMENTS,AGAIN IT WAS DONE FOR GOOD.GOOD LUCK AND THANKS FOR WRITING YOUR STORIES,YOUR FAN.

Great

I enjoyed the story a great deal. I am in favor of ending C with one change - he should provide a full copy of the tapes to Roger's wife, and also include a copy of the DNA paternity of the baby (so he doesn't get stuck for child support). This way she could divorce Roger and hit him in the wallet for being a cheater. Maybe Jerry could recommend a good divorce lawyer when he gives her the evidence:-)

Very Enjoyable

I could have accepted any of the four endings. I don't care for cheating wives and could understand the way A and C went. At the same time I appreciated the other endings where the guy was able to answer his own question "What did I do to deserve this?" He started his marriage with a lie and continued it, knowing his wife wanted children and then making sure he couldn't. While there was certainly betrayal on her part, there was on his too. I'm glad you addressed that Bob. A better-than-usual story.

A very fine story.

You covered all the bases and you did it with style. Thanks.

I totally agree with Patricia51. But then again I usually do.

George

No Good Alternatives

Of the four choices you provided A and C are unnecessarily brutal and B and D are almost too forgiving. If I had to vote I would choose D but without Roger. Your story proves that a marriage based on a husbands lies and a wife's cheating are so sad that there really is no good solution. The only reason I chose D is because I like happy edndings. the Ct. Yankee

Great

verygood story with nice endings and very well written

Admittedly he was wrong in keeping the truth from

her, but his mistake is no reason for her to fuck another man to get pregnant. For me the choice would be a combination of A and C. Although D would be good if it didn't involve Roger.
If it was something that they sat down and discussed like a loving couple should, none of this would have happened.
Yes, D would be the option if Roger wasn't included. If she really wanted more children, most vasectomies can be reversed these days.
As for the punctuation and spelling, as long as they don't radically affect the story, it should be all right.

dude

we all knew that writers jack off

Another ending!!??

Interesting-- the various endings. The one I would prefer would deal with the problem but he would have the vasectomy reversed and Roger history. Only the first would be Rogers. It would take a lot of forgiveness and probably never have the trust again.

I can't see a yard full of someone elses kids. And I can't see the wife continuing to fuck someone else while still married to me.

you need to...

put a little more effort into your writing. ya know Bob, 4 endings isn't really that many,a couple more would have been helpful! lol.
nice touch. sorta precluded some of the sarcastic remarks(but not mine) that are handed out all too frequently to amatuer writers.
keep up the good work.
don

Gratification

Big Word - Big Motivation

You are quite talented and could be writting for real money if you were inclined (or perhaps you do elsewhere)- But - you can't have each way (let along 4 ways)- We know that you know about life and it's twists and realities. Life has consequences and they make for good non-contrived writting and reading. That can be erotic.

While his error was very bad, his wife's was unforgiveable to anyone with good sense - her old lover - not artificial insemination or try to reverse his operation? come on - don't contrive us - your fans - take the flak - write it as you see it - when you bend it we are not fools - life has consequence - then again many writers here don't understand that so why shouldn't you ignore reality - well because you want to be appreciated for what you can do that many of the hacks can't - bring us believeably into your story - credible twists are good - they keep us in the hunt for something that entertains us - you have it - please use it properly for us and you. Regards

Nice, and yet...

This is not a critcism, just a point you may not know. A vasectomy can sometimes be reversed. The technique used in the original operation and the skill of the surgeon doing the reversal being key of course.

Thanks for the alternate endings.

4 in one was great

I really loved having four endings. It made the story a lot more fun. You did very well. Thanks.

Imaginatively Deranged but Entertaining Until End

Well Not Plain Bob - but talented warped Bobie in a friendly way.

You wove a interesting scanario until the last few paragraphs where he commited himself to self cuckolding adfinitim and with held her lovers knowledge of it.

Rationally questionable - sanely uninteligibly sorid - maritally suicide! Fantasy no - just science fictionally demeaning self cuckolding.

You are too good a talent to be so warped - aren't you? Try! This is offered constructively - please don't delete right away as some were.

Imaginatively Deranged but Entertaining Until End

Well Not Plain Bob - but talented warped Bobie in a friendly way.

You wove a interesting scanario until the last few paragraphs where he commited himself to self cuckolding adfinitim and with held her lovers knowledge of it.

Rationally questionable - sanely uninteligibly sorid - maritally suicide! Fantasy no - just science fictionally demeaning self cuckolding.

You are too good a talent to be so warped - aren't you? Try! This is offered constructively - please don't delete right away as some were.

Well done

D is my ending to a great story

Like your idea of choices

Each choice brings it's own interesting change to the story and with the exception of another alterbate ending of killing one or both the lovers should satisfy most readers. Well done.

Got to love the choices

This story was going great and then when you added the multiple ending, it was just icing on the cake. Personally I liked ending D the best. Keep up the good work

a and c

the others suck

A and C

The other two endings sucked, but i really liked ending a and c. The whore wife got just what she deserved.

Can still be another ending

Consider If he loves her and is going so far as to raise the other man's kids. He might as well get a reverse vasectomy and father his own kids. Sheesh they are reversable.

Just the usual great stuff

Again, just the usual good stuff from Just Plain Bob. Any of the four endings works for me. In the wide expanse of human emotion, different people are going to do different things and readers are going to identify with the ones they want. Keep it up, thank you. Oh, and how do you manage to get all of these written?

tail end pete

Same Author?

I have a hard time relating this story with the body of your works. While the theme might be comparable, the procedures and conclusions don't fit, not with any of your endings. I would hope that you would write to make yourself happy, and those that like your stories will continue to read them, regardless of the comments of a very few. You have a skill to use your talents but this is the first of your stories that I did not outright like. Your clever variation on the theme have kept me entertained and I look forward to your tales. PLease keep up the good work and thank your for sharing them with us.

Great Story!

I can see how frustrating it must be to get comments that are neither constructive or relevant to the story. I think your stories are great and you don't need to change a single comma :-)!

Pretty good except for

the commas and semicolons being stuck in the middle of the tenses (some of which were too tense!) - yeah, I love some of the reader's feedback too!

With minor wordsmithing I like ending D followed by ending B. They actually flow together quite well.

I really liked your discursion on the impact having kids have! Sounds like some first hand experience!

It was an interesting story that provokes a lot of thought. Particularly some soul searching about getting married if you are not in agreement on some fundamental issues. I'm sure this causes tons of divorces!

Good job! I liked it!

just fine

i like to read these stories, not for the commas, thanks.

Just a Couple of Difficulties

I may be in the minority here, but I don't really like the "pick your favorite ending" approach. Rather than feeling like audience appreciation, it smacks of cowardice, an unwillingness on your part to commit to an ending. And I think I know why; the story comes with such a dissonant flaw that no ending is going to be satisfying. The flaw (of course) is the husband's unilateral decision to get a vasectomy weeks before marrying the wife who wants to have children. This level of dishonesty and treachery is too hard a character flaw to turn him into a hero. We'll dispense with the whole infidelity, cuckolding, cuckoo's-egg set of betrayals and just focus on this one. When the wife finds out (and she WILL find out in real life) that the husband knew he was sterile when he married her, she'll freak out. And rightly so, this is a fundamental betrayal of her trust in his honesty, as well as demonstrating that he and she have completely different views on a basic part of marriage - and he won't even tell her so! Nothing that follows is plausible, since the husband can't be a sympathetic victim as he's portrayed when he's clearly such a treacherous bastard. And I think that's why the endings don't jell.
Ignoring the big problem with the husband, there's more questions with the reconciliation endings. The split-up endings were less interesting and pretty predictable, but the one where he looks fondly at "his" children, realizing how wrong he had been to oppose having children, is both bittersweet and creepy. Has he ever confessed? Is he OK with his wife having a long-term sexual relationship with her old boyfriend in order to have kids? Or is he on an extended guilt trip from realizing that it's all his fault? All these questions should be addressed.
The other reconciliation ending focusses on how the wife tells her boyfriend that she loves her husband only, he's just her fertilizer (and the guy who gets to fuck her whenever he husband can't), and she never wants to leave her husband. He decides to reconcile and confront the adultery and seek reconciliation. This might be believable, assuming that he can bring himself to be honest as well, and if she can give up her fuck buddy (and maybe adopt kids?). There's other dark currents in the story as well, notably her unwillingness to answer accustions about having multiple lovers with BF #1 - the statement "you can't prove it" isn't very reassuring. All in all, these three aren't very good risks for forming any kind of strong family.

Can't please everybody

I personally loved the story and all the endings. It is so hard to please everybody on here and i just read for the enjoyment of reading knowing that nobody here is an author with unlimited resourses to edit there stories i prefer to overlook the faults and enjoy the stories keep up the good work

the first ending

I liked the ending where he comes home and tosses both vicki and roger outside in the front of the house naked hubby shouldnt have to pay and support the children they arent his he wasnt the sperm donor so why have him supporting her and the babys since he couldnt give her any babies you must like to see hubby squirm or is it you want vicki to be the winner for cheating on the husband?
Atlanta,Ga

Harden the fuck up will ya?

For fuck's sake dude. No, you cant please everyone. So stop trying. Sure, just like many other reviewers out there I give you shit for your lame, softcock, man wanna be type stories, but you write better than most here which says a lot. Devise a plot and stick to it. I'm sure that even I've given you 100's for the stories I felt deserved them, but I will not rate a story that will try to prostitute itself to everyone.

Please everyone?

Not a chance! The only person to please is yourself. Though I get the joke. In fact, I loved that even when you write something for everybody, you still cannot please. So please, just keep writing and do what makes you happy because that will encourage YOU to keep writing. We all need an audience, but unless you are happy with what you write, why should you write. I look forward always to finding a new story by you, even when I HATE what you write about. But I read all the time, and even have to read things I do not like or agree with. SO what? Just ignore the people who have nothing constructive to say and listen to those who like what you write and encourage you.

another great story

love your stories JPB. and i am sure you affended somebody with this one so ---- em. Thanks for entertaing us or at least
ME. Mike from Texas

the last ending

I would go with the last ending ending D.

Last Ending Good

I am not at all into revenge and divorce stories. The straying wife that hubby stays with are a real turn on to me though. I am always looking for those to read.

Sorry I find the multiple ending thing to be a

lack of willingness to find an ending for your story and having the guts to write it.

What a wimp, afriad to put an ending on it

The only two endings I cared for were A and C. Of those C actually seemed the best to me. However, personally I could not have lived with her one more moment after having learned that she had placed herself and me at risk by her bechavior and her actual lack of love and understanding of me by what she had done. No one, not even a woman who wants children, does this and actually loves their spouse. It is the ultimate act of hatred and revenge nothing less. Had she loved her husband a conversation would have occurred before this happened.

Absolute balderdash!!!

Get real for Christ sake!

Interesting story

I don't know what ending is best.

I have to agree with jpb on this one

no matter which ending is picked no group will be happy.

I didn't like any of the endings.

Criminal

I would never support cheating but what this guy did was criminal. He deserves the worst that can happen to him. To marry a woman knowing her desire for children and also knowing that you will never give her any is the absolute worst. The cheating wife gets my sympathy in this story.

the best

was C.

Which Ending?

Ending C....of course!!

it's your fucking story bob - how about you write one ending for it.

He cheated

by having a vasectomy prior to marriage and concealing it from Vickie. What sort of a man is this who could do that to a woman. Having created the mess he should live with this.

C

He got what he asked for - even though - he didn't consciously know it...she wanted babies!!!

He could have told a different lie in the beginning and told her his sperm count would never give them babies and see what happens.

At any rate, he lied, she got her pregnant wish and he had to decide what to do - she really loved him but - she wanted children...so...

I think "C" but with an admission on his part that he had lied to her, was devastated that she chose to cheat but he understood. For him, even adopting or artificial insemination was out BECAUSE - He stated from the start...'He Didn't Want Children - Period!", and now, he still isn't going to want to raise and expense a child.

He put her in a bad spot and should have let her date other men and married someone else, now she is with baby, Roger is married and she is alone...He's an asshole but he got what he deserved...she didn't and I feel sorry for her BUT...

"C"

Thanks Bob.

None of the Above

My ending: Jerry walks in the bedroom catching his wife and Roger fucking. He grabs Roger by the hair and lifts him off his wife and starts beating on him. Then makes him a eunuch by kicking his balls to shreds. Says if he tells the cops he'll call his wife. Roger does nothing. Then Jerry calls the whore's parents to pick her and her baby daddy and take them away. They get a divorce and Jerry meets a woman who doesn't want kids and they live happily ever after. (Condensed version)

Yeah that's better.

Multiple endings?

I feel like I'm back in High School, taking a multiple choice test. I'd rather JPB write his story and end it the way he likes. That way I can complain about it, point out the terrible grammar and punctuation usage, put in my two cents worth on how I think the story should have actually ended or explain how the characters SHOULD have behaved! It's so much more civilized to do it that way. It's the Literotica Way. Read the story, act like it's a true life story and then throw darts at the author.