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Rolling Wishes on Ice

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by Anonymous

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by Tathagata11/16/04

Great

visuals.
And a charming piece.
Thank you

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by irishcatsmeow11/16/04

Fate...

even a penny never knows where it will end up (or does it?)...great portrayal of synchronicity. This poem is subtle but says so much.

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by catastrophe11/17/04

lovely

Very sweet, nice flow.

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by twelveoone11/17/04

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call me thick, I have no idea what this is about.
This is a strong visual piece:
the short line
"It rolls" - 3x
the other two lines
with "rolls", shorter also, drawing attention to, very effectively, what is the most important word here.
It mimics... and you seem to be writing with a slow rhythm

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