All Comments on 'The Burdens of Others'

That was both beautiful and a little depressing ❤ you could totally make this into part of a book

Stunningly evocative of the human experience. We all need that release, and some of us need it so bad that getting it will nearly break us.

Kudos for guiding us so close to the edge.

I'm crying a little bit. What a beautiful, emotional tale. I am in awe.

Good kinky story. Good character development. Good ratio of sex to story.

But damnit, did ya have to make it so depressing? I was almost crying at the end.

But any story that can draw a strong reaction is a good story.

So I'll give ya 5 stars for the emotional hole I gotta crawl outta now.

Great job.

I liked the story a lot. Very different from the normal stories in the category. The setting lent itself to a gritty, grim, personal examination of Oriel. Through the ups and downs of life at the field hospital, she found escapism through rough sex. It wasn't exactly healthy, but a desperation for human connection and a way to forget where she was. For the time she was restrained and pleased, she found relief from her situation. This brought a sense of uneasy calm to the story, like we hoped it would turn out for the best for her, but had a nagging fear it might not.

5 stars for being brave enough to submit this... and for the brave Oriels and Eds we don't know who brave inhuman conditions to give medical care to those who need it the most.

Very different and almost painful to read, but in the end, worth it. The sex was hot for sure. The story, however, was more about two people seeking at first escape, then absolution for what they went through.

Beautiful.

Loved it. So raw and painful and a ray of hope at the end.

Masterful

I really enjoyed how you drew us in to know and care for these characters. That you made so many people "feel" is a testament to your skill.

Well done ^_^

(Others and) I have nominated The Burdens Of Others for a Reader's Choice award. If you liked this story, consider checking out the links on Lit's main page or the Contests section of the forum. Thr first round of voting ends on March 31.

Who knew erotica could be art

Wow well done well done indeed yeah yeah Readers Choice Award you get my vote

You and Tim O'Brian both know what you're talking about. Thank you.

I knew when this piece started with a Tim O'Brien quote, I was reading more than erotica. I have never read sex in literature that made more sense as part of the story, part of who the characters are, than in this story. This is exceptional writing, outside of the realm of erotica.

Beautiful, heart-rending craftsmanship expressing the human experience! Thank you for sharing!

What a beautiful story!!

It is rare that a story here fulfills both the 'lit' and the 'erotica.'

The density speaks to the author's skill, so much within three pages.

Heartbreaking. And Erotic. Excellent story.

There are song lyrics that go: please surrender, and lay down your arms tonight; the battle's over... as I read this story I started thinking about that song.

What a powerful piece of writing—staggering in its command of the language and its understanding of human emotions. In my 70 years I’ve rarely read anything of this quality. Wish I could say I wrote it. What a gift to us readers, at any price, much less free. Thank you, AmoryParks.

Barry

"The play of tension and stillness in her body hung tight with potential, a silent violin string. So he played her, and the sounds she made were beautiful."

are perfect.

A truly lovely story, so beautifully written, so evocative of the situation and the relationship.

Thank you.

cause he's gay

The most moving story I have read in years. As a Dominant Sadistic Veteran who has worked in Welfare and Health in remote communities you have nailed kinkster emotions, comfort and pleasures in a setting so real. Thank You!!

There isn't much else to say. It's perfect. Thank you for sharing your stories with us, AmoryParks.

Lots of cool poetic phrases. Lots of art. A real good story.

A beautiful story. On a totally different level from most Literotica stories. Your prose is a delight. So many great turns of phrase.

For all that this is a story it’s haunting, visceral and very very real. A stunning piece of writing.

Tess (UK)

Wow, that was definitely not what I expected. Heart-wrenching one of the best stories I've read here

Pure art

This is one of my favorite stories, anytime, anywhere. When my clear memory of it fades I find myself drawn back to it and I rarely reread anything. The mood, ambiance, emotions, and characters are sublime. You are a virtuoso and language is your instrument. This story inspired me to try writing my own and I return to it periodically to remind myself of what I strive for. And because it’s just a really a moving story. Thank you!

This is awesome, good job.

This story never fails to amaze me! Perfect characterization and pacing. I hope you are doing well during the times of COVID-19, Amory. I can only imagine how bad the hospitals are now. Thank you for being a doctor on the front lines!!

This story never fails to amaze me! Perfect characterization and pacing. I hope you are doing well during the times of COVID-19, Amory. I can only imagine how bad the hospitals are now. Thank you for being a doctor on the front lines!!

Lovely story, thank you for writing.

Mesmerising characterisation. Thank you does not say enough. Lay-down misere 5-stars!!

thanks for making me Google Tim Obrien. story was brutally real and so sad. Every day I am so "disgusted" about Ukraine and gutless World Leaders

The rawness is poetic. Well done!!