What an amazing story. Not one of your characters was surplus to requirement. You managed to create and maintain key moments of suspense but not at the expense of character development. I appreciated the fact that you let each love scene with each of the central pairs to unfold giving equal weighting to the sensual and erotic discovery to each coupling. By exploring the sensual side of the protaganists even up to an including their death scenes you adding an additonal element to the story. It's good to see 'baddies' being given some 'air time' in terms of sexual release and passion. While the mayor is portrayed as a total scumbag you even gave him an amazing cum, well timed with his demise. cudos!
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What an amazing story. Not one of your characters was surplus to requirement. You managed to create and maintain key moments of suspense but not at the expense of character development. I appreciated the fact that you let each love scene with each of the central pairs to unfold giving equal weighting to the sensual and erotic discovery to each coupling. By exploring the sensual side of the protaganists even up to an including their death scenes you adding an additonal element to the story. It's good to see 'baddies' being given some 'air time' in terms of sexual release and passion. While the mayor is portrayed as a total scumbag you even gave him an amazing cum, well timed with his demise. cudos!
This story was a pleasure to read thank you.
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