All Comments on 'Trapped in a Game Pt. 04'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
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Please have Josh, Kelly, Serra and Dana all get together as a sexual foursome and make it out of the game together to consummate that group marriage in the flesh as soon as they are pulled out of the game.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago

Not cool dude, not cool. I wait months for this chapter and then it’s left on another cliff hanger :( By far one of the stories I’ve enjoyed the most on this site. Thanks for writing

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
nice

Great cliff hanger leave them wanting more cant wait

Flamus211Flamus211over 6 years ago

The wait for this chapter was well worth it! I need more. Keep up the amazing work.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
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sigh, hope you're up to the task of keeping these jackels happy

fk86jrbfk86jrbover 6 years ago

As with the previous 3. Bravo. Wonderfully written. Keep up the good work.

AllumealluAllumealluover 6 years ago
Wow

Great... please keep writing...

Lonely_readerLonely_readerover 6 years ago

Aaaah, the craving that only a really good story line can leave you.

Please hurry with the next installment, I'm already on withdrawal!

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Keep it up!

I love this story. I was beginning to think I wouldn't see it's conclusion. Please keep writing, looking forward to the next installment.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Great story

Really enjoying it

SWIM21SWIM21over 6 years ago
So damn good

I was worried that you were going to leave us with a horrible emotional cliffhanger after the way Kelly started acting right toward the end, but this new development with Serra tied everything up in a nice bow as we languish in anticipation of your next offering.

zorrander163zorrander163over 6 years ago
Thanks

Thank you for your writing. I patiently look forward to future parts.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Enjoy this story

Please not so long between chapters

Leather69Leather69over 6 years ago
Keep going

That little fist pump when I saw you had be able to add another chapter, and it did not disappoint. I continue to look forward to more chapters, as well as any other works from you.

On a strange topic, just watched trailer for "Ready player one" and immediately thought of this story, and how I all ways thought this wold make a great HBO show, (minor changes to relationships) .

CooperSC85CooperSC85over 6 years ago
Amazing read

This is quite simply one of the best stories on this site. Please keep them coming over Christmas break if you can. Thanks for publishing a great addition to this story. DAMN CLIFFHANGERS!!!!!! But otherwise I look forward to your next instalment.

Burning_HereticBurning_Hereticover 6 years ago
Ugh! So Gooood!

God, this story is so good! I absolutely adore your writing style!

Do you have a Patreon? I feel like I should be paying for this.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago

Where is that patreon so that you can write more??? Your stories never dissapoint. Keep up the good work, we all wish you the best ♡

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
MOREEE

I freaking love this story. Although it makes me kinda sad. I doubt you'll have him end up with both Serra and Kelly and I cant stand the thought of them missing out. Although, now a third love interest has popped up I can hope theres a Harem ending

Just_a_GentJust_a_Gentover 6 years ago
Wonderful Series

Thank you so much for this series. I am in love with this story. If you changed a few of the more taboo elements, this could be published for bookshelves and mainstream audiences!!! Please don't take too long for the next chapter. I agree with other commenters, you'd definitely do well with a patron page.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago

You'd have to leave out the incest. Patreon doesn't allow it in hardcore sex stories. Easy to change.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Wonderful

I love the series, have from day one. This one, with the cliff hanger end, I love. Can't wait for part 5

KousakacomplexKousakacomplexover 6 years agoAuthor
Thanks everyone

Thanks everyone for all of your comments. It means a lot to me.

@Burning_Heretic being able to make a living while writing is the dream. I've looked at patreon and even created an account, but I've kinda been hesitating to pull the trigger on setting it up properly and actually using it. Sometimes I think it'd be great to be able to continue writing full-time like this, and then sometimes i think to myself, who are you kidding, you aren't good enough and anyone who ever supports you will hate you when you fail to deliver. :( The writing is coming along really well right now though, so I'll think about really doing it maybe after a couple more submissions.

@everyone who took the time to read, thanks to every one of you as well. :)

I hope everyone will continue to enjoy the story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Keep it up

Man, your writing style is utterly captivating, this story is so so good, keep it up mate. I can't wait for the next chapter, if it takes another four months for something of this quality so be it!

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Awesome new part

I haven't been following your works for that long (since part 2) but you're hands down my favorite Literotica writer of all time, I check your page almost religiously to see if you post anything new, keep up the awesome work

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
absolutely the best ! please keep it going

ShadowEtheralShadowEtheralover 6 years ago
Very Good

A great series, it has to be one of the most enjoyable stories I've read so far. If only Kelly and Serra were not both so likeable, I don't know who to root for.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Great read

I hace really enjoyed reading and am waiting for the next part anxiously it feels like a mixure of my favorite light novels (sao, no game no life and log horizon) with the extra spice. Really keep up the good work it is a better storyline than any of those mentioned. I hope you do publish a novel or series of novel one day i would really enjot reading them.

Best of luck.

Elvian

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Amazing!!!

I was waiting for so long for this episode, I read it in a single go in the bath. It’s so good, I just kept wanting more to read

inno0cent_bystanderinno0cent_bystanderover 6 years ago

Not anything damned cliff hanger!!!

captmuleridercaptmuleriderover 6 years ago
Great......

Awesome chapter, and now impatiently waiting on the next....... keep it up

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago

Thanks for continuing your story, I really enjoy reading it. :)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago

If you wanted to do a Patreon or publish this story, an easy fix would be to change Kelly to his step-sister. It's just something to keep in mind if you might want to go down that route.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago

patreon allows no incest or semi incest in pornographic/adult material. instead of step-sister, just make her a friend.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Believe!

This is a great story and your writing is really good. It can be hard to believe in yourself, but you should just pull the trigger on that patreon. People here really like your writing and one of the best ways to prove yourself to yourself is to just jump in.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Patreon

You'd be a fool not to do it, but remember patreon does not allow plagiarism, so if you use things like Raveloft, make sure they are open source or you have permission. It will kill your account.

Good luck.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
SAO

Sword art online

Really good read and I enjoyed the animated series as well. Your story is really done well. Please do continue :D

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago

Dude this story is fucking awesome!! please continue it.....and write a little bit fast....jus sayin.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
the rest of the story

I have been eagerly reading your story its very interesting and addictive please post the rest of the story soon as possible

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Waiting for Next Installment

Amazing story, very well written. Its an addictive read. Well done, Good luck and please do keep going. Cheers

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Fun read!

Hey, this is well written and very fun to read.

So far, Sierra's character and Josh are the most natural....

Kelly reads rather forced..... Almost like her taboo sexual preference for Josh defines

Her. Please keep writing. And I do hope the girls can learn to share....

Josh is worth it.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Nice cliff hanger!!

Nice! MORE!!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
More right now please!

More right now please!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Simply Amazing!!!

You have me completely addicted to this story. It is very well written and extremely engaging. Please don't keep us waiting long.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
MOAR!!!

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Re: MOAR

author writing his own comments. Log in, fucking loser.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
binged

Very nice, just binged all all four of these chapters today (with a short dnd session interrupting it).

And as expected, now that I'm to this point, I'm just upset that there isn't more! And a cliff-hanger on top of everything else. Typical.

Incest isn't my thing, but you did really well with this (and with the all of the sao elements, including the semi-harem bit). I only have minor gripes, like "You used 'muttered' a lot of times where it didn't fit," and "Serra was much too ready to get physical from the beginning," and only noted minor flaws that slipped past editing.

But like I said, great job. Now I've got *another* series to watch for updates on - and unfortunately, this isn't even under a genre I'd normally check.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Amazing

So excited for the next one. Keep it up.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Incredible Read

One of the best stories that have ever read. Can't wait to read more.

tekel83tekel83about 6 years ago
Looking forward to more

I can't wait for more of this story and I keep coming back to see if chapter 5 is out yet. Hurry and finish the next chapter so we can see where you take us next.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Great Read!

One of the best stories I’ve ever read! Looking forward to seeing where it goes from here

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Cliffhanger

The only problem I have with this story is that a cliffhanger when you're going to be waiting for months for the next chapter is painful. I realize, however, that stories sometimes take even their authors in their own direction and they may have preferred otherwise. So the narrative may have warranted it but I'll necessarily be patient.

DaCozDaCozabout 6 years ago

I came for the porn, I stayed for the brilliant story.

Zenai69Zenai69about 6 years ago
Great Story

Love the story. One of the best story lines I have read. I would think it would be great addition to Hall of fame. My only feedback is to try and improve on time between stories.

SleeperyJimSleeperyJimabout 6 years ago
Come on Dude!

Please get on with it! I need my next fix of grown up SAO as soon as possible. Love this series.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Awesome

This is by far, the best story here. I don’t mind waiting months for each chapter, but, please don’t abandon it.

AllumealluAllumealluabout 6 years ago
Brilliant writing!

Next part please...it's been weeks since last part

KousakacomplexKousakacomplexabout 6 years agoAuthor
Status update

Hey all, thanks for all the comments and feedback. I am working on Part 5 whenever I can, but my free time has been limited since January. Part 5 is also a bit more difficult to write, because a lot of it is being told from other perspectives, and its a bit more work getting into voices that aren't Josh's. It's about halfway finished, but don't expect anything before April. I am also now pretty sure that the series will be finished by part 7 or 8.

On another note, I'm releasing a new story that I also wrote since January, probably by this weekend. It's a full length short story (about 60 pages word doc length) that will be entered in the April's fool contest, so please do drop by and check it out. :)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago

I've read sci-fi since I was a kid, and I would definitely buy a book you wrote just because you wrote it. You are extremely talented as a writer, and I look forward to reading more from you

AzuremaneAzuremaneabout 6 years ago
Simply amazing and well written!

I love your writing style. It is fluid and has all the dramatical effect that keeps readers hanging on to the edge of the seats and always begging for more. I love SAO and really wanted them to delve deeper in to that brother/sister (*spoiler alert* cousins) romance that was building, albeit on one side, but they could have done more with it.

Please do not rush your work. I enthusiastically await the next part like so many but it does show in the work when you are rushing a little bit more. Small grammatical errors pop up when on some of the others there were virtually none. As a writer myself I often see this when I am feeling a bit rushed to complete something or if I am stressed. Please keep up with your awesome work and if you ever need a sounding board or someone for ideas then let me know.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago

Definetly one of the best stories I've read. I just stumbled across this series last night and now can't wait for the next chapter. : )

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Awesome story

Can’t wait to see where this goes!

AllumealluAllumeallualmost 6 years ago
Next Part

Awesome series....Please continue. When will the next part be available?

KousakacomplexKousakacomplexalmost 6 years agoAuthor
Next release

@Allumealu The next one will be soon. If you're interested in updates by the way, check out my patreon page (link in my bio), I'm posting weekly status updates on the writing progress there and the updates are public so you won't need to pledge to see them.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Genuinely Impressed beyond words!

I wont lie, I came to your literotica profile from your first posted story on literotica for smut. Even back then in early 2017 your story had well "a good story" which even though I was there for smut, I genuinely appreciated the lengths you went to for storybuilding. However after binge reading everything you've posted on literotica over the past 7 hours I've honestly given less shits about the smut than the story (well, at least in the trapped in a game series). I'm genuinely impressed with your writing skills and i can't wait for more installments in this and any other stories you might publish here. And once I've gotten a stable job again, I think I might become a Patreon member.

Keep up the amazing work Mate!

Sincerely,

R.E

captmuleridercaptmulerideralmost 6 years ago
Great Story

We are patiently waiting on the next episode. Keep up the great work!!

KousakacomplexKousakacomplexalmost 6 years agoAuthor
Part 5 is up

In case you missed it, it's up, but in the SciFi/Fantasy category.

bokentoebokentoeabout 4 years ago

I decided to read the first chapter of your story cause it had multiple parts and i thought it could be an interesting read. Now i'm about to start the fifth chapter and i find i can't put it down. i have to keep reading it and find out what else happens to the characters.

I wish Josh would stop making it all about his sister though and do something with Serra. I mean, they both know about each other, so i would like to see josh have a normal relationship with Serra while Kelly can join them or something along those lines.

The story is so far set out well that it could go on for quite a long time. Looking forward to the next chapter!

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

I'm years late, but I took a shower thinking about this story and couldn't stop laughing at one bit.

The cloaks that are supposed to mask your identity in game and in real life are basically going to ensure that all these PKers are caught with solid evidence. And it's the exact kind of thing that gamers would absolutely think works, but obviously wouldn't if you know how these systems work. Because it's literally the kind of thing that happens, and people get caught for it all the time.

First, lets just assume that this world has to follow at least the basic rules of computing and can't do anything possible. That means three things need to be kept track of, and these are things that would be logged.

Every player's inventory, including a log of changes. MMO's keep track of when you gain, lose, or equip items. That probably won't change.

Player locations. The game server has to know where you are in order to let other people know where you are. This includes unknown players current disguising who they are. If player A suddenly disappears, and an unknown player suddenly appears, anyone could put two and two together. And because the timing servers run on, we're talking about fractions of a second so small that you could almost always put 2 and 2 together.

And also, it has to keep track of who you are lol

It's literally impossible for an MMO that to have an item that masks all your information from both the players (which is doable) but also the server itself. Because otherwise you could never take it off. The server wouldn't know who you are once you took it off, so the masking would be a permanent change. Plus if you actually masked your player ID from the servers, you'd immediately lose everything associated with your PC. Like, your inventory, including, you know, the cloak itself.

If that cloak functioned in a way that would actually do its job, it would have to literally reset you back to game's baseline minimal functional player character.

So it doesn't. The cloak has to obey the rules of computing. Which means every single person involved is 100%, absolutely going to get caught.

Plus items in MMO's are unique and their locations need to be tracked. It'd be pretty obvious is cheater A spawned in a scroll-of-fucking-murder-someone. It'd be really obvious when they gave it to PKingAssholeB. And when suddenly UnknownPlayer69420 uses that uniquely identified IT to kill RandoNoName, well, we know who had that unique item. So we now know who killed that player.

I haven't ready past this chapter, but if the Author ends the series with all those people getting locked up because they're fucking stupid I'm going to love it.

Thank you for coming to my TED talk.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 year ago

Fantastic Story Your Writing is the Best !!!!!

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Kousakacomplex here! My writing is all about romance, and as my name implies (if you're familiar with it) the brother sister love stories are (mostly) where it's at for me. I'm an amateur writer, having written a couple of light novels already, but recently my life has brought...

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